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Tewwg Perfect Paragraphs
Paragraphs Edi*ng
Problem Solu*on
Your
Name
Bernstein
Assignment
Title/Class
Sec;on
Date
Original Title*
Too much or too li?le introduc;on Determine purpose; add moderate details
No thesis Determine what are you trying to show your reader.
In-‐text
references
to
chapters
or
pages
(“On
Use
context
of
story
to
set
up
quota;on
reference
page
37,
Janie...)
Ending peters out Write a decent conclusion of an appropriate length
*Boring
;tle Cra`
an
interes;ng
;tle
-‐-‐
wordplay,
descrip;on,
steal
from
thesis,
grad
readers’
a?en;on
Perfect
Paragraphs
Edi*ng
Day
1:
1) Highlight
the
problems
you
can
see
right
now
in
your
paper
(don’t
worry
if
you
cannot
find
each
problem:
you
may
not
have
them,
or
you
may
not
recognize
them).
Highlight
and
annotate
to
the
outside.
If
you
think
you’d
trust
a
friend
to
be?er
find
your
problems,
have
him/her
trade
papers
with
you.
DO
NOT
FIX
THE
PROBLEMS
YET!
2) Outline
your
paper,
line
by
line,
briefly
wri;ng
the
purpose
and
content
of
each
line.
Here’s
an
example
for
my
1st
paragraph.
(You
may
find
that
some
of
your
lines
are
redundant
in
content
or
have
NO
purpose;
that’s
fine
-‐-‐
here’s
where
revision/edi;ng
helps!.)
(1)In
this
novel
of
a
woman’s
search
for
self,
Zora
Neale
Hurston
employs
metonymy
to
represent
the
community’s
hegemonic
disapproval
of
Janie’s
unconventional
lifestyle.
(2)When
Janie
returns
to
Eatonville
after
an
absence,
a
group
of
women
on
the
porch
gossip
about
her
relationship
with
a
younger
man,
her
long
hair,
and
her
seeming
loss
of
means.
(3)Referred
to
metonymically
as
“the
porch”
or
“these
sitters,”
the
tongue-‐clucking
women
criticize
Janie,
making
“burning
statements
with
questions,
and
killing
tools
out
of
laughs”
(2).
(4)
In
this
opening
scene,
the
group
is
presented
as
one
whole,
exhibiting
one
ferocious
voice,
referred
to
only
as
the
plural
“they”
sitting
in
judgment.
(5)
Their
“mass
cruelty”
seems
to
be
a
displaced
aggressive
response
to
the
harsh
treatment
they
receive
during
the
day,
as
“tongueless,
earless,
eyeless
conveniences”
working
the
Nields
as
“mules”
and
“skins,”
so
their
criticism
affords
them
some
sense
of
superiority
over
a
woman
who
has,
at
least
for
some
time,
escaped
their
collective
fate.
# Content Purpose
1 thesis:
metonymy
represents
community
disapproval Provides
intro
to
book
and
ZNH’s
technique;
establishes
argument
2 porch cri;cizes Janie about rela;onship, hair, poverty Establishes context of scene
3 the “porch” uses their tongues as tools Use of metonymy to show cri;cism
4 community’s voice is ferocious one Violence of language shows vitriol
5 “mass
cruelty”
is
born
of
displaced
aggression Suggests
reasons
for
their
anger
and
judgment