November 12, 2021

Supervisor
Eventide Residential Aged Care
333 Glen Eira Road, Ripponlae, Vic. 3185

RE: Mrs. Margaret Goldstein, 61 years old

Dear Ma’am/Sir,

I am writing to transfer back to your care Mrs. Margaret Goldstein, she is admitted to our facility due to dislocated right
elbow. She is for discharged and for your continuous management is requested.

Mrs. Goldstein was admitted on 8th of November 2017 after she fell accidentally in the Homecare. She had injury as a
result cuff with sling applied, in addition slow recuperate noticed on her right elbow. She was commenced the
medication as follows Atacand plus 32/12.5 25mg per day, Rameron 15mg per day and lastly Oxydone 5mg three times a
day to be continued as needed.

During hospitalization Mrs. Goldstein developed urinary incontinence which require disposable adult diaper. Even
though she is hesitant to wear it her skin integrity is intact. She requires assistance in taking a bath and used ambulatory
assistive device such as wheelchair. She is medically stable now and plan to discharge on 12 th of November, 2017.

It is worth noting for to observe the recovery of Mrs. Goldstein right elbow as well her bladder incontinence care.
Moreover, scheduled follow up to physiotherapist has been done on 28 th of November, 2017 at 0200 pm in Eventide.
Kindly note Mr. Sol Goldstein will accompany her back to the Nursing Home.

Should you have further questions regarding Mrs. Margareth Goldstein, please do not hesitate to contact me.

Yours faithfully,

Nurse

Criteria Points
 Purpose (3 marks)
Content (7 marks)
Conciseness & Clarity (7 marks)
Genre & Style (7 marks)
Organisation and layout (7 marks)

Language (7 marks)

Total
Tip: Total of 38 marks. Atleast get 27 to hit a B 
Test-takers securing grade B will have achieved predominantly
scores of 2 out of 3 for Purpose and 5 out of 7 for the remaining
criteria.

Overall Comments

Grading System:

35-38 A
27-34 B
26-20 C+
Below 20 C

Estimated Grade 0
 WRITING As s e s s me nt Crite ria and Le ve l De s c ripto rs PUBLIC VERS ION

Band Purpo s e Band Co nte nt Co nc is e nes s & Clarity Ge nre & S tyle Org anis atio n & Layo ut Lang uag e

Content is appropriate
to intended reader and Writing is clinical/factual and
Length of document is
addresses what is appropriate to genre and Organisation and paragraphing
appropriate to case and Language features
needed to continue reader (discipline and are appropriate, logical and
Purpose of document reader (no irrelevant (spelling/punctuation/vocabulary/
7 care (key information is knowledge); technical clear; key information is
is immediately information included); grammar/sentence structure) are
3 included; no important language, abbreviations and highlighted and sub-sections are
apparent and information is accurate and do not interfere with
details missing); polite language are used well organised; document is well
sufficiently expanded summarised effectively meaning
content from case appropriately for document laid out
as required and presented clearly
notes is accurately and recipient
represented
6 Performance shares features of bands 5 and 7
Writing is clinical/factual and
Content is appropriate appropriate to genre and Organisation and paragraphing
Length of document is
to intended reader and reader with occasional, are generally appropriate, logical
mostly appropriate to
mostly addresses what minor inappropriacies; and clear; occasional lapses of
Purpose of document 5 case and reader; Minor slips in language generally
2 is needed to continue technical language, organisation in sub-sections
is apparent but not information is mostly do not interfere with meaning
care; content from case abbreviations and polite and/or highlighting of key
sufficiently highlighted summarised effectively
notes is generally language are used information; layout is generally
or expanded and presented clearly
accurately represented appropriately with minor good
inconsistencies
4 Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5
Content is mostly
appropriate to intended Inclusion of some Writing is at times Organisation and paragraphing
reader; some key irrelevant information inappropriate to the are not always logical, creating Inaccuracies in language, in
Purpose of document 3 information (about case distracts from overall document or target reader; strain for the reader; key particular in complex structures,
is not immediately or to continue care) clarity of document; over-reliance on technical information may not be cause minor strain for the reader
1
apparent and may may be missing; there attempt to summarise language and abbreviations highlighted; layout is mostly but do not interfere with meaning
show very limited may be some only partially successful may distract reader appropriate with some lapses
expansion inaccuracies in content
2 Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3

Content does not

Purpose of document
is partially 1 about the case and
0 obscured/unclear
and/or misunderstood
provide intended reader Clarity of document is The writing shows Organisation not logical, putting
sufficient information obscured by the inadequate understanding of strain on the reader; or heavy
Inaccuracies in language cause
inclusion of many the genre and target reader; reliance on case note structure;
considerable strain for the reader
what is needed to unnecessary details; mis- or over-use of technical key information is not well
and may interfere with meaning
continue care; key attempt to summarise language and abbreviations highlighted and the layout may
information is missing not successful cause strain for the reader not be appropriate
or inaccurate

0 Performance below Band 1

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