Unit 1 Peer Review Workshop: Content

Directions: Mark your responses directly onto the paper you are editing. Or, you can write your
answers here. If you are unsure, simply state that something seems off but you are unsure of
what.

1. Is the essay in MLA format? If not, what suggestions can you make to the author to get it
to MLA format?
a. The only suggestion I have for the MLA format is to add the due date of the
paper. Even though Kate talked to me, and explained that she left the day as 00
because it is just a draft, I would recommend her to add the due date of the paper,
even if its just a draft.

2. Does the essay include a controlling idea that is not obvious to everyone? In other words,
does it reveal something not everyone would know about how and why the participants
use the genre within the given community? Where can the author develop more of an
analysis or more fully develop the ideas?
a. Yes, this essay does have a lot of interesting, new, and well expressed ideas for
readers. For example, one of the interesting facts talked about in this essay are the
3 things that can be used to prevent human trafficking.

3. Does the author use observations and the genre itself as evidence to support the claim?
a. Yes, Kate does use her genre as a way of evidence. For example, her explanation
of what an ombre is describes one of the devices that are used in her genre.

4. Does the essay maintain a cohesive focus around the controlling idea? Mark any tangents
that you find in the essay.
a. Yes. This essay does maintain a clear sentence-idea structure, and it is well
explained and detailed.

5. Is the tone and language appropriate for your English 1301 class? If not, suggest for the
author what changes they might make.
a. Not in a bad way, but I believe that the language of this essay is a little bit too
formal, and could be confusing for some readers. For example, the use of the
word ombre, even though for some it may be understandable, it can be confusing
for other people.

6. Does the conclusion answer the three questions (Did I do what I said I would do?; Why is
this important?; and What do I want my audience to do with this information?)

7. Indicate in the text where the author needs more details.

8. Indicate in the text where the author needs more evidence.

9. Indicate in the text three places where the author deserves praise for this essay.

10. Indicate in the text three places that the author should fix before submitting the essay.

11. Has the author chosen one (and only one) genre to analyze? Is the genre a written genre
and not a video or an image?
a. In this case, the author did use 2 genres, that are both Facebook posts that contain
videos.