Kate’s Questions for Essay 2

Isabella Camarillo

Unit 2 Peer Review Workshop: Content

Directions: Mark your responses directly onto the paper you are editing. Or, you can write your
answers here. If you are unsure, simply state that something seems off but you are unsure of
what.

1. Does the author make a claim that includes an interpretation about how three
communities use the selected genre? Is this claim clear and direct? What is it? Mark it in
the text. What suggestions do you have for the writer in order to strengthen the thesis?
Has the author chosen one (and only one) genre to analyze?
Yes, the author did include interpretation about their three communities. Yes,there
is a clear direct, highlighted in green. There are no suggestions and yes the author
has chosen one genre to analyze.

2. Does the essay include a controlling idea that is not obvious to everyone? In other words,
does it reveal something not everyone would know about how and why the participants
use the genre within the given communities? Where can the author develop more of an
analysis or more fully develop the ideas?
Yes, the author has inputted a controlling idea to where not a lot of people would
know. The author has developed enough analysis.

3. Does the author use elements from the genre in the three communities to support the
claim made about it? What are they? Mark them in the text. Are they used as good
evidence? Indicate why or why not in the text. What kind of evidence would help the
writer demonstrate his/her point?
Yes, the author does use elements to support the claims. highlighted in blue. Yes
they are used as good evidence by using examples of how organized their online
menus are.
4. Does the essay maintain a cohesive focus around the thesis? Does the author use solid
transitions to guide his/her ideas? Determine, as a reader, how you want to be presented
with the information. Does the organization work for you? Indicate suggestions for
organization and transitions. Also, mark any tangents that you find in the essay.
Yes the essay does contain the focus around the thesis by adding examples and
examples more about the different menus.Yes, the author makes good transitions
leading into the different features of the communities.
5. Where could the author use more detail to further illustrate his/her claim? Indicate these
places in the text.
The author has enough detail making their claims
6. Are the introduction and conclusion focused on the main point of the essay? Does the
conclusion answer the three questions? (1. Did I do what I said I would do? 2. Why is this
important? 3. What do I want my audience to do with this information?)
Kate’s Questions for Essay 2
Isabella Camarillo

The introduction does focus mainly on the main points of the essay, but there is
no conclusion.
7. Indicate in the text the author’s strengths and weaknesses.
Strengths is underlined and weakness is highlighted in yellow
8. What three revision suggestions do you have for the writer?
I have no revisions for the writer
9. Indicate in the text where the author needs more details.
highlighted in red

10. Indicate in the text where the author needs more evidence.
highlighted in purple

11. Indicate in the text three places where the author deserves praise for this essay.

highlighted in light green