Lauren Perez

Professor Nelson
ENGL 1302
12/1/2021
Instructor Feedback

Minimum Requirement Evaluation

To earn the minimum grade of a C, your essay must…

1. Be in MLA format—No
2. Be on time—Yes
3. Have been peer reviewed in workshops—Yes
4. Meet the page requirements (1,000-1,200 words)—Yes
5. Have a controlling idea (claim) with evidence from the experiment and outside sources that
supports it—see Feedback from Rubric
6. Be cohesive and organized around your controlling idea—see Feedback from Rubric
7. Be specific and give details and examples—see Feedback from Rubric
8. Hand in essay and reflection on time—Yes

Feedback from Rubric

Controlling Idea

C- | Text presents a controlling idea, though it may not be revelatory or clear and is
somewhat supported with sub-claims, though some may seem tangential. Text presents
ideas, but the ideas do not further the author’s purpose.

Evidence

F | Text either does not present any evidence for the controlling idea or the evidence does
not further the author’s purpose and is tangential. Note: the evidence from the experiment
can’t actually provide much in the way of an answer to the research question—the
methods and tools don’t match the needs of the question.

Description
 C- | Text presents an understanding of the concept of research, although it is clear that
that the author stumbles to fully comprehend. Text presents some evidence to
demonstrate the understanding.

Genre Competence (Research Paper)

C- | Text seems confused about the purpose of the research paper genre, though the
purpose is accomplished. Evidence of a misunderstanding of audience and how the genre
works for the author’s purpose.

Style, Grammar and the Writing Process

B- | Style and grammar are somewhat appropriate for the assigned genre and audience.
Text appears to have not benefitted from proofreading and editing.

Comments:

This Essay 1 Final Draft provides a good start on a paper about an experiment that uses a
recognizable structure, however it does not actually include all of the 4 scholarly peer reviewed
journal articles that are listed in the Works Cited. If sources are listed in the Works Cited, then
corresponding in-text citations should be readily found in the paper to signal where you are
borrowing information from (all of) those sources.