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Essay 3 Instructor Feedback
Essay 3 Instructor Feedback
Essay 3 Instructor Feedback
Professor Nelson
ENGL 1302
12/1/2021
Instructor Feedback
Controlling Idea
B | Text presents a revelatory controlling idea that guides the text, supported with the use
of relevant sub-claims that further the author’s purpose/ intended meaning of the text.
Evidence
B | Text presents evidence in a logical manner and has been chosen based on relevance to
the controlling idea and ability to further the controlling idea/author’s purpose.
Description
A- | Text presents a clear understanding of the concept of research. Text also presents
evidence that demonstrates this understanding.
Instructor Comments:
I have turned on Track Changes in your document and formatted it correctly (but not entirely—
check your citations) so that you can see what it should look like. You can “Accept Changes” to
keep this formatting.
Margin comments:
In Introduction:
Use sources to help support the points being made in introduction
In Roles in Society and Culture:
Needed sources to back up my statements
Grammar mistakes
Better transitioning
In Religion:
Needed sources to cite my sentences to support
Unclear statements
Needed to specify what religion I am making a connection to
In Grief:
Create a connection from the previous paragraph to grief
Stronger topic sentence
In Work Cited:
Not entirely in MLA format