Lauren Perez

Professor Nelson

ENGL 1302

12/1/2021

Peer-Review Feedback

My questions for Essay two for Peer Review:

1. Is the first sentence a good attention grabber? 

2. Is there any unnecessary information? 

3. Do my sentences flow together? 

4. What do you think I should focus on more? 

5. Does the introduction sound argumentative?

A student’s feedback:

1. Yes, because you introduced your topic and mentioned how it is overlooked by most
people.
2. No, I feel that all the information in your introductory paragraph is relevant to your topic.
3. Throughout the entirety of the paragraph your sentences flow well and are cohesive. It
isn’t until towards the end of the paragraph that your sentences start to sound slightly
choppy.
4. Maybe you can focus on and add more information as to the historical and scientific
background of gender fluidity.
5. Yes, your introduction does sound slightly argumentative due to the second sentence.