Lauren Perez

Professor Nelson

ENGL 1302

12/1/2021

Peer-Review Feedback

My questions for Essay one for Peer Review:

1. Is this a good starter or a good hook in the introduction?

2. Are they any unnecessary sentences?

 
3. Does my research question make sense?

4. Are there any grammar mistakes?

 
5. Is the ending of the introduction good?  

A student’s feedback:

1.  I like the introduction as it forces the reader to think. Also creates some curiosity as to
what you have to say. 
2. I think the beginning statement of your methods paragraph should be re-worded. As a
reader I feel like I already know what BMI is and what it means for your article. 
3. Yes the question itself makes sense, but maybe you should specify on what field or
person is it for athletes, law enforcement...If not make it more known in the introduction
that its more of as generalization study.
4. I feel there aren’t many grammar mistakes, but running it through Grammarly or
something of the same aid should help 
5. Yes it sounds good cause it corresponds well with the rest of the introduction 

Another student’s feedback:

1. For the first sentence in your introduction, i've heard some people say that you should
avoid starting with a question. Although it might not be as captivating to some, i still
think it could be used. But you can always turn your question into a statement too. It is a
good understandable question though. 
2. You ending to your introduction really ties in well. 
3. Your last sentence in your methods sections sounds a bit off to me. Maybe try rewording
"it also has played a role"