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Essay 2 Instructor Feedback
Essay 2 Instructor Feedback
Professor Nelson
ENGL 1302
12/1/2021
Instructor Feedback
1. Be in MLA format—Almost
2. Be on time—Yes
3. Have been peer reviewed in workshops—Yes
4. Meet the page requirements (1,200-1,500 words)—Yes
5. Have a controlling idea (claim) with evidence from all the sources —see Feedback from
Rubric
6. Be cohesive and organized around your controlling idea —see Feedback from Rubric
7. Be specific and give details and examples —see Feedback from Rubric
Controlling Idea
C | Text presents a controlling idea, though it may not be revelatory or clear and is
somewhat supported with sub-claims, though some may seem tangential. Text presents
ideas, but the ideas do not further the author’s purpose.
Evidence
C | Text presents evidence for the controlling idea, though not all the selected evidence
furthers the author’s purpose or it is unclear how the evidence works to do so. Some
tangents present.
Description
C | Style and grammar are somewhat appropriate for the assigned genre and audience.
Text appears to have not benefitted from proofreading and editing
Instructor Comments
This paper has a lot of potential, especially given the sources you have located. Please see my
marginal comments on your final draft and let me know if you have any questions.
Margin Comments:
Title:
A strong title but weak information
Introduction:
Mixed construction
Sentence structure problems
Grammarly incorrect
Unclear controlling idea
Gender Fluidity:
Conclusions:
Fix wording
Work Cited: