Guide: How to best present your

accomplishments
These examples illustrate how to take your entry from being ordinary to
extraordinary, and indicate what type of evidence you should attach
1.Model UN:

Good:
I was part of Harvard Model United Nations, where I featured in the United Nation Security Council
Committee. Here, I was in competition with 30 other candidates on a very competitive topic on the
Kashmir Issue. I participated with zeal and was able to secure a Best Delegate award. This award placed
me among the top 10 candidates overall at the conference consisting of 200 candidates from around the
world. (Describes role clearly, states the number of candidates out of which they won the award, states
the name of the award, the candidate pool size and what the title of the award means - top 10)

Poor:
I participated in Harvard MUN, where I won a best delegate award. I learned how to be diplomatic and
debate better. The competition was very competitive and I was among the top 10 in all. (Does not tell
how many competed or what the level of the achievement was)

Good Evidence: A certificate of Best Delegate with evidence of the competition level through a letter of
recommendation or link to a news article.
Insufficient Evidence: A picture of you in the committee debating.

2. Volunteering Project:

Good:
I led a group of 20 people within the Red Cross department of my school to work on providing
Ramadan Afar services to underprivileged/homeless Muslims of the area. I was able to use GoFundMe
to raise PKR 50,000 in funding, as well as collected food and other supplies worth about PKR 7,000.
The provision of these services benefitted about 200 people within the community. (Uses numbers to
specify the amount fundraised, estimate the worth of tangible goods collected and illustrate the number
of people impacted)

Poor:
I led a group of volunteers and managed to provide facilities to homeless Muslims within our
community for Ramadan. Through the raising of funds and collecting other items, we were able to help
them open their fast and allow them to eat well. This allowed me to understand the importance of
sharing and helping. (Does not provide quantifying details)

Good Evidence: Gofundme screenshot and a reference letter describing your role and how many people
were impacted by the project
Insufficient Evidence: Random pictures of volunteers, a certificate of appreciation with just your name
on it

3. Academic Achievements:
Please avoid using academic accomplishments that are part of your regular classwork, such as being
valedictorian or earning high marks on exams taken specifically for University admissions. We consider
your classroom achievements as part of our transcript review.

Acceptable example to include: I took Python courses from Coursera for 4 months, studying 8 hours a
week, and gained a special badge in coding on Coursera through completing these courses. It allowed
me to become adept at coding in Python and solve projects needed to pass this coursera course with the
best scores.

Good Evidence: Certificate of completion of the course that includes the course name and your name
Insufficient Evidence: link to the course description on the Coursera website

Example that should not be listed in the achievement section: I did well in Physics in my High School
and scored a 100% as shown by my transcripts. This high score got me a medal in Physics by my
professor.

4. Startup:

Good: I started my own company that provides educational software to other edtech companies. I
organized and worked in a team of 3 people to code this software. Last July we launched the product
version and already have five customers. With this, our software is being used by approximately 2,500
people and the company has earned $3,000 in revenue to date. (Specific details describing the role, team
size, how many people were impacted and revenue earned).

Poor: I started my own company that works on providing educational software to other edtech
companies. We believe that as a team this is the need of the market. We have launched our beta version
and hope to bring the product in market soon. We have also started to pitch our product for money
raising and hope to raise enough funds soon. (This project is still in the developmental stage and does
not have concrete results to share yet)

Good Evidence: Link to the startup’s website, reference letters from existing customers, profit ledger
Insufficient evidence: Pitch slideshare, Business plan

5. Family Commitment:

Good:
As my father had difficulty finding work and my mother suffers from an illness, our family was short on
financial resources. To help us all, I worked about 10 hours a week after school for two years. I was still
able to maintain strong grades at school and earned around $3,000 to help with our family expenses.
(Explain the family commitment, show what you were able to achieve and how you improved the
situation)

Poor:
Due to my mother’s sickness she couldn’t work, so we were short of financial resources for some time.
This was a very tough time on our family so I took on extra responsibilities to help out. (If describing a
family commitment, provide detail to show how you worked to improve the situation)

Good Evidence: Reference person or reference letter that supports the details mentioned, proof of
employment
Insufficient Evidence: Reference letter that simply confirms the mother has an illness
6. Summer Program:

Good: I attended Stanford Pre Collegiate Summer Program in Environmental and Earth Sciences which
has a highly competitive acceptance rate of 5% of a total of 1,000 applicants from across the world. I
was able to achieve the best presenter award within my cohort of 20 students and later secured a position
in my university’s lab to continue researching within the field. (States the specific name of the program,
has statistics for the selection process, and states the award received)

Poor: I attended a science summer program at Stanford. Although it was very hard to get into this
program, I managed to be selected from the many students coming from different countries around the
world. I got to learn a lot about the issues of the environment and how we can reduce climate change,
and received an award at the end of the program. (No numbers and vague descriptions)

Good Evidence: Acceptance letter, link to website with statistics for acceptance, Letter of
Recommendation, Award certificate
Insufficient Evidence: pictures of you attending the program, presentation slides

7. Exchange student:

Good: I was selected to be part of the YES Exchange Program to be hosted by a family in Texas in the
United States. YES has an acceptance rate of 2-3% within Pakistan from around 2,000 total applicants
each year. This program allowed me to gain perspective into a completely different environment and
learn from many different students about their cultures and traditions. (States acceptance rate and
applicant pool size of the program, states what they learned)

Poor: I was selected to be part of YES Exchange Program to be in the USA. I was hosted in Texas.
While there I was able to participate in different competitions and interact with new people, so learned a
lot. (Does not provide details about the selection process or application pool size for the program)

Good Evidence: Acceptance Certificate, link to website with acceptance statistics and details for the
program
Insufficient Evidence: Pictures with host family

8. Research Position:

Good: I conducted research with a prestigious professor at my university to find statistical analysis
details surrounding usage of UN resources to reduce terrorism. My primary and secondary research data
was used to write a research paper, which got published by Minerva Schools and was presented at the
UN Conference on the Human Rights of Victims of Terrorism after being selected from 2,000 other
papers. (Provides details about the topic of research and describes how the research was successful,
states pool size of research papers out of which theirs was selected to be presented)

Poor: I conducted research on the use of UN resources to reduce terrorism with my professor. I wrote a
paper and conducted research, which allowed us to present our paper at a conference and publish it too.
(Does not provide specific details of the research topic, does not specify how the paper was selected to
be presented at the conference)

Good Evidence: Paper’s publishing reference and website, reference to professor, invitation to the
conference, website link with statistics around conference
Insufficient Evidence: Pictures from the conference, slide show of the conference presentation, picture
of applicant with the professor

9. Art Related:

Good: I have loved to sing since I was young and in my freshman year joined my high school’s choir
which has 26 members that practice before school for an hour 3 days a week. This past year our choir
was invited to perform at a winter assembly in Salzburg, along with 6 other high school choirs from
around the region. At first I was nervous to perform in front of the audience of around 1,200 people, but
everything went great and it gave me a new confidence to perform on a big stage. (States number of
choir members, time commitment, number of other schools invited to perform at the assembly, and
audience size)

Poor: I have been singing for a long time and then joined the choir in school. Our choir practices a lot
and performs at school and community events. Once we performed at a winter assembly in another city
in front of a really large audience. Although I was nervous at first, this gave me confidence to perform
on a big stage. (Does not provide specific information about the size of the choir, or the assembly)

Good Evidence: link to an article in the school paper about the choir traveling to perform at the
assembly, reference letter from choir teacher with details about the event
Insufficient Evidence: a photo of your choir on a stage with no distinguishing details