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Write a paragraph about good points and bad points of cell phones in about 100 words.

I think phone have some good points and bad points. First, we can communicate our friends even
though we live far from each houses. Secondly, we can search some words we don’t know by
using the cell phones. We can use it for studing. For example, new knowledges of Math, English
vocablaries, and so on. However, there is bad points on the same time. There is a lot of bad
people who involves us in a crime. We should be careful using phones otherwise you might be
dengerous. Therefore, the cell phones have both good points and bad points.

I think phone have some good points and bad points. First, we can communicate our friends even
though we live far from each houses. Secondly, we can search some words we don’t know by
using the cell phones. We can use it for studing. For example, new knowledges of Math, English
vocablaries, and so on. However, there is bad points on the same time. There is a lot of bad
people who involves us in a crime. We should be careful using phones otherwise you might be
dengerous. Therefore, the cell phones have both good points and bad points.