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Senior Exit Project Scholarship Essay
Senior Exit Project Scholarship Essay
Ella Damon
Mrs. Scharf
ERWC Period 4
25 January 2022
Scholarship Essay
Rubric
After completing your Scholarship Essay Assignment, highlight in yellow what you believe
6 5 4 3 2 1
W 11-12.4 A little Reflection is thoughtful and The student reflects on The student Attempt No
Produce clear and more reveals the author has his/her essay and how reflect on the to reflect evidence
coherent writing successful reflected on specific aspects he/she revised. The changes he/she
in which the than a 5 of the essay and how to student shares some of made but the
development, revise. The writer seems the specific techniques reflection might
organization, and genuinely engaged in the and changes he/she made be more
style are process of reflecting and but could go into more surface-level or
appropriate to revising by writing about detail. to just “get it
task, purpose, and the changes she/he has over with”
audience. made.
W 11-12.5 A little Develop and strengthen Develop and strengthen Develop writing Attempt No
Develop and more writing multiple times as writing as needed by by revision or to revise evidence
strengthen writing successful needed by planning, planning, revising, planning.
as needed by than a 5 revising, editing, rewriting, editing, rewriting, or
planning, or trying a trying a new approach,
revising, editing, new approach, focusing on focusing on addressing
rewriting, or addressing what is most what is most significant
trying a new significant for a for a specific purpose and
approach, specific purpose and audience.
focusing on audience.
addressing what
is most
significant for a
specific purpose
and audience.
Original Essay
Write the essay’s prompt (recreate to the best of your ability) here:
What are some of the lessons that Scout learns throughout the novel, through the interactions
To the best of your knowledge, what scores did you earn on this essay? If you can’t
remember the scores, what were some of the things you struggled with in this essay? What
needs to be improved?
If I remember correctly, I got around a 3 on this essay, and it was on a four point scale. Some
things I struggled with was choosing quotes that helped my thesis. Something that I need to
improve includes the analysis and explanation of the quotes that I had previously chosen, as well
[Put your original, unrevised essay here. It can be typed or pictures of your handwritten work]
Ella Damon
Mr. Boyatt
11 March 2019
To Kill a Mockingbird
In the novel, To Kill a Mockingbird, Harper Lee tells the story of a young girl, Scout,
growing up in Maycomb, Alabama. Both Scout and her brother Jem Scout learns many useful
and valuable from people in her neighborhood. By interacting with Miss Caroline, Mrs. Maudie,
Mrs. Dubose and Atticus, Scout learns to fully understand a person, you need to see things from
their perspective, to have courage, stay humble, and if something tragic happens, to see the
One of Scout’s first lessons she learns in the novel is to not judge a person by their
cover or background until you walk in their shoes. Miss Caroline, Scouts new first grade teacher,
is not pleased with Scout when she finds out that she already knows how to read. Miss Caroline
tells her that “[her] father does not know how to teach”(23). Scout does not understand the new
way Miss Caroline is teaching her, and why her father is not aloud to teach her to read anymore.
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Even though Miss Caroline is just introducing a new way of teaching, Scout does not
understand why she has to differ from the other teachers at the school. When Scout tries to tell
Miss Caroline that “Walter’s one of the Cunninghams”, she replies with “beg your pardon”(26).
Miss Caroline does not know that the Cunninghams do not accept something they can not pay
back. When Scout comes home from school that day, she tells her father what happened and he
replies that “you never really understand a person until you consider things from their point of
view, until you climb into their skin and walk around in it”(39). Atticus is telling her that she may
During Scout’s interactions with Miss Maudie, she learns that if something terrible or
tragic happens, the result can be positive. The day after the fire, Scout goes and talks with Miss
Maudie who tells her that “she hated that old cow barn. Thought of settin fire to it a hundred
times”(97). This shows that Miss Maudie is not grieving that her house had just been burnt
down, yet excited that she can have a fresh new start. Miss Maudie explains to Scout that she
has “always wanted a smaller house” and that she “will have more room for [her] azaleas
now”(97). This shows how greatful Miss Maudie was for something as tragic as losing her
house. Miss Maudie is the example to Scout that if something in life does not go as planned,
Mrs. Dubose taught both Jem and Scout what real courage was, and that it was not
some guy with a gun in their hands. Mrs. Dubose is furious with Jem for ruining her flowers, so
for a consequence, she makes Jem come and read to her for a month. When Jem is reading to
her one day, she asks him if “[he] regrets it now”(146). She asks him this because she knows
that he is nervous and furious, but he does not know that it is taking all of his courage to
accomplish a small little task. After Mrs. Dubose dies, Atticus tells Jem that he “wanted to [him]
to see what real courage is, instead of getting the idea that courage is a man with a gun in his
hand”(149). If Atticus did not force Jem to do a chore for Mrs. Dubose, Jem may have not seen
Throughout the beginning of the novel, Atticus teaches Scout to stay humble, and if
something is not worth being said, than to not say it. When Scout is complaining to Miss Maudie
how her father does nothing interesting, Miss Maudie tells her “there’s a life in him yet, he can
make somebody's will so airtight, can’t anybody meddle with it”(120). Miss Maudie is telling
Scout obvious things that Atticus can be, such as a great lawyer. Scout is not impressed, and a
couple days later, she tells Scout, “If [her] father’s anything, he’s civilized at heart. Marks
manship’s a gift of God”(130). When Atticus shoots the mad dog, both Scout and Jem are
shocked, but Miss Maudie told them he never said anything about it because he was a humble
From interacting with Miss Caroline, Miss Maudie, Mrs. Dubose and Atticus,
Scout learns to not judge a person by their appearance, to have courage, stay humble, and stay
positive in negative times. Miss Caroline teaches her to not judge a person until you see things
from their point of view when Scout tries to tell her that Walter is a Cunningham. Miss Maudie
teaches Scout to stay positive when her own house burnt down. Mrs. Dubose teaches both
Scout and Jem what real courage was when they were forced to read to her. Finally, Atticus
taught Scout when he never told her that he used to be a great hunter, that he was being
Revised Essay
Type your revised essay in this section. Make sure to highlight in yellow the changes you
made from the original. These should be significant, meaningful changes, not just changes
To Kill a Mockingbird
In the novel, To Kill a Mockingbird, Harper Lee tells the story of a young girl, Scout,
growing up in Maycomb, Alabama. Throughout the novel, both Scout and her brother Jem learn
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many useful and valuable lessons from people in her neighborhood. By interacting with the
characters such as Miss Caroline, Mrs. Maudie, Mrs. Dubose and Atticus, Scout learns that in
order to fully understand a person, it is important to see experiences from their perspective. She
also learns that it is important to have courage while also maintaining humbleness, and if a
tragedy occurs, to look at the benefits that may arise from the situation.
One of the first lessons that Scout learns is to not judge a person by their cover or what
someone has told you until you get the chance to step into their shoes. Miss Caroline, Scout's
new first grade teacher, is the one whom she learns this lesson from. Miss Caroline is not
pleased that Scout already knows how to read, and she tells her that “[her] father does not know
how to teach”(23). Scout is not accustomed to the new teaching style that her teacher has
introduced, and does not understand why her style has to differ from the other teachers at the
school. Scout returns home and tells her father what had happened, and he replies that “you
never really understand a person until you consider things from their point of view, until you
climb into their skin and walk around in it”(39). Atticus is telling her that she should see things
differently or from someone else's perspective before making an assumption about their
character or what their life may be like. Scout does not know Miss Caroline well, and she
decided to make an assumption about her from just a few days of knowing her.
Interactions with Miss Maudie teach Scout that if something terrible or tragic occurs, the
outcome might not always be negative. Miss Maudie’s house had just burnt down, and the day
after the fire, Scout goes and talks with her. Miss Maudie tells her that “she hated that old cow
barn”, and how she “thought of settin fire to it a hundred times” (97). This occurrence shows that
Miss Maudie is not in grief of her house burning down, yet instead sees it as an opportunity for a
fresh start that she had been wanting. Miss Maudie explains to Scout that she has “always
wanted a smaller house” and that she “will have more room for [her] azaleas now”(97). This
shows how greatful Miss Maudie was for something as tragic as losing her house. Miss Maudie
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is the example to Scout that if something in life does not go as planned, something else may
Scout has already learned many valuable lessons through various people throughout the
novel, and Mrs. Dubose is another one. She was the one who taught both Jem and Scout what
real courage was. Mrs. Dubose is furious with Jem for ruining her flowers, so for a
consequence, she makes Jem come and read to her for a month. When Jem is reading to her
one day, Mrs. Dubose asks him if “[he] regrets [ruining her flowers] now” (146). She asks him
this because she knows that he is nervous and furious, having to take responsibility for his
actions. Yet, after Mrs.Dubose dies, Atticus tells Jem that he “wanted [him] to see what real
courage is, instead of getting the idea that courage is a man with a gun in his hand”(149). Jem
had not realized that doing a favor for Mrs. Dubose actually took courage. If Atticus had not
forced Jem to do a chore for Mrs. Dubose, he may have never learned what courage actually
In the beginning and even throughout the novel, Atticus teaches Scout the importance of
staying humble in trying times, and if there is something not worth being said, it is better to keep
it private. When Scout is complaining to Miss Maudie how her father does nothing interesting,
Miss Maudie tells her “there’s a life in him yet, he can make somebody's will so airtight, can’t
anybody meddle with it”(120). She shares this to show that Atticus Miss Maudie is telling Scout
obvious things that Atticus can be, such as a great lawyer. Scout is not impressed, and a couple
days later, she tells Scout, “If [her] father’s anything, he’s civilized at heart. Mark's manship’s a
gift of God”(130). When Atticus shoots the mad dog, both Scout and Jem are shocked, but Miss
Maudie tells them he never said anything about it because he was a humble and civilized
person.
Through all of the interactions that Scout has, she learns valuable lessons that may not
only benefit herself, but the people that she is surrounded by. Some of these lessons include
how to see things from a different perspective before you end up judging someone, and the
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ability to have courage as well as staying humble and seeing a positive outcome from a
negative experience. Miss Caroline teaches her to not judge a person until you see things from
their point of view when Scout tries to tell her that Walter is a Cunningham. Miss Maudie
teaches Scout to stay positive when her own house burns down. Mrs. Dubose teaches both
Scout and Jem what real courage was when they were forced to read to her. Finally, Atticus
taught Scout when he never told her that he used to be a great hunter, that he was being
Reflection
1st Paragraph: Write a paragraph explaining specifically what you revised in your essay
and why. Go into thoughtful details! How did these choices improve your essay? What
skills do you now have that you were able to use to help enhance your essay?
The main things that I revised in my essay included the wording of sentences, as well as
bettering the analysis that I had for the quotes I had chosen. I had a lot of repetition throughout
my analyses, not diving into different ideas that could have been explained with the quotes that I
had picked. These choices that I made improved my essay because it made my essay more
interesting to read, since it wasn't repetitive and also helped the reader fully understand what I
meant and why I decided to choose the quotes I did. Some skills that I have acquired since I
wrote this essay include being able to choose quotes that flow well with my thesis, and adding
analysis that will tie back to my thesis. Before, I did not write the analysis to tie back to my main
idea, and now that I did that, it helps my essay flow easier.
2nd Paragraph: Write a paragraph explaining how you’ve improved as a writer since your
freshman year: What did you struggle with before? What are you proud that you can do
now?
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Something that I struggled with before included that I did not use the best quotes that
supported my thesis or my argument. Something else that I have improved on included using
more of a sufficient analysis when trying to support the evidence that I used. I have since learned
that the evidence that you pick holds the same amount of importance as the analysis itself I also
learned it is important to choose a quote that doesn't explain itself, so I can explain it, yet at the
same time choosing a quote that isn't able to be analyzed in the sense I want it to.