Scholar’s Notebook #2

Kaitlin Kawata
Scientific Writing
ENGL 363

2022 February 14 Vigorous Verbs, Vivid Language

Team members: Kristen Abe, Katie Van Gorder, Daniela Hernandez, and Daniel M.
Metaphors
“To understand why, consider the human immune system. Just as sick people aren't very
productive at work when their fever is high, plants grow poorly when their own immune systems
are overloaded.” Crow, P5
To relate to the reader. . .
Metaphor to introduce the prospect of the research. They need to use genetics to find a
way to combat bacterial diseases in rice, just as humans are able to generate some defense
against disease and bacteria as well.
“plant-munching insects.”

Adaptation + example
Dialogue: “I like to imagine that in 50 years' time my grandchildren will say, ‘Granddad, did
people really use chemicals to control disease when they could have used genetics?' And I'll say,
‘Yeah, they did.' That's where we want to get to.” Crow, last paragraph.
To conclude the overall aspect of the study, emphasizes the importance of finding
different and safer ways to combat disease for plants.

Vivid language and associated science

Uses the terms: “NPR, TBF1” . . .
“Overloaded” P4
“Plants don't have a bloodstream to circulate immune cells. Instead, they use receptors on the
outsides of their cells to identify molecules that signal a microbial invasion, and respond by
releasing a slew of antimicrobial compounds.” Crow, P3.

On Your Own: I think these modifications are really effective because it allows an audience that
may not be apt to scientific reading, be able to understand. Having these methods, such as
metaphors, are very simple to adjust to. Being able to make these kinds of modifications is also
skillful, as the writer is comprehending and utilizing this knowledge.
11 March 2022 Summary Activity

Team Members: Kristen Abe, Katie Van Gorder, and Daniela Hernandez

ROUGH DRAFT
Katie: Dr. Doshi was diagnosed with cancer and believed her only treatment would be
chemotherapy. She searched for doctors for second opinions. Eventually she was led to a new
form of cancer treatment that involved a less invasive pathway. These options have shown to
increase life expectancy of cancer patients in comparison with chemotherapy and have provided
less side effects.

Dr. Doshi was diagnosed with cancer and consulted doctors for minimally invasive cancer
treatment options.

Possible replacements:
New cancer treatments aim to substitute chemotherapy

Replace chemotherapy with minimally invasive cancer treatments that increase survival rates and
life.

FINAL DRAFT
New therapeutics aim to substitute chemotherapy as the primary option for cancer
treatment, seeking to improve life expectancy and vitality.

MAIN POINTS:
● No chemotherapy. Side effects are bad. Other treatments!
● Increased life expectancy w/o chemo
● Undertreating and or overtreating with chemo