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UNIT 9: Directed Writing - Report Writing: What Is A Report?
UNIT 9: Directed Writing - Report Writing: What Is A Report?
UNIT 9: Directed Writing - Report Writing: What Is A Report?
What is a report?
A report usually tells the reader about an event that has taken place.
The writer may analyse or observe these events/situations.
Reports are always written for a particular audience.
They are clear and objective (unbiased), reporting the facts.
Report Writing
Introduction Paragraphs
Be clear about the main event Details of what happened
Who Facts and statistics
What Use topic sentence
When Subheadings
Where
Paragraphs Connectives
Make points clear Use time connectives (Earlier, Later that day, Afterwards).
Point Reports of an event would give information about what happened in
Evidence chronological (time) order.
Explain i.e. FROM THE BEGINNING TO THE END
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Focus Form
Stay objective - this isn't descriptive writing - its a clear presentation of Formal and Standard English
information. Variety of sentence lengths and punctuation
You may come to a conclusion but there should be no exaggeration or emotive
language.
Ending
Finish with some points for improvement or your suggested action for any
similar events.
This might be things that went well, or recommendations to prevent further
problems
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Your report should
Style
Be clear of who the report is for
Is it formal or informal
Use a variety of sentences
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Task With Response
A French professor tells of how he and his friend, and a sailor called Ned, fell into the Pacific Ocean in
1850 when their ship was hit by a huge creature. They at first believed it to be the legendary whale they
were searching for on behalf of the International Marine Society.
My first concern was to look for the ship. I glimpsed a black mass disappearing eastward, its lights
fading in the distance. I shouted for help, swimming desperately toward the ship. My clothes were
weighing me down. I was sinking! Then I found and seized the arm of my loyal friend.
‘As I jumped overboard, I heard the helmsman shout, “Our propeller and rudder are smashed by the
monster’s tusk!” ’
‘Then the ship can no longer steer, and we are done for!’
Having concluded that our sole chance for salvation lay in being picked up by the ship’s longboats, we
had to take steps to wait for them as long as possible. I decided to divide our energies so we wouldn’t
both be worn out at the same time: while one of us lay on his back, the other would swim and propel his
partner forward.
The monster had rammed us at 11 in the evening. I therefore calculated on eight hours of swimming
until sunrise. The dense gloom was broken only by the phosphorescent flickers coming from our
movements. I stared at the luminous ripples breaking over my hands, shimmering sheets spattered
with blotches of bluish grey. It seemed as if we had plunged into a pool of quicksilver.
An hour later, I was overcome with tremendous exhaustion. My limbs stiffened in the grip of intense
cramps and paralysing cold. I tried to call out. My swollen lips wouldn’t let a single sound through.
I heard my friend cry ‘Help!’. Ceasing all movement for an instant, we listened. His shout had received
an answer. I could barely hear it. I was at the end of my strength; my fingers gave out; my mouth
opened convulsively, filling with brine…
Just then something hard banged against me. I clung to it and was pulled back to the surface.
I fainted… Then someone was shaking me vigorously.
‘Yes, professor, but I was luckier than you and immediately able to set foot on the gigantic whale as
it surfaced. I soon realised why my harpoon got blunted and couldn’t puncture its hide. This beast is
made of plated steel!’
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I hoisted myself to the summit of this half-submerged creature that was serving as our refuge. I tested
it with my foot. Obviously it was some hard, impenetrable substance; not the soft matter that makes up
the bodies of our big marine mammals but a bony carapace, like those that covered some prehistoric
animals. The blackish back supporting me was smooth and polished with no overlapping scales.
On impact, it gave off a metallic resonance and, incredibly, it seemed to be made of riveted plates.
No doubts were possible! This animal, this monster, this ‘natural phenomenon’ that had puzzled the
whole scientific world, that had muddled and misled the minds of sailors, was an even more astonishing
one – made by the hand of man! There was no question now. We were stretched out on the back of
some kind of underwater boat that took the form of an immense steel fish.
Just then, a bubbling began astern and the boat started to move. We barely had time to hang on to
its topside, which emerged about 80 centimetres above water. It was imperative to make contact with
whatever beings were confined inside the machine. I searched its surface for an opening, but the lines
of rivets were straight and uniform. We would have to wait for daylight to find some way of getting inside
this underwater boat, and if it made a dive, we were done for!
In the early hours, the vessel picked up speed. We could barely cope with this dizzying rush, and the
waves battered us at close range. Our hands came across a ring fastened to its back, and we all held
on for dear life.
Finally, the long night was over. From inside the boat came noises of iron fastenings pushed aside. One
of the steel plates flew up, and a few moments later, eight sturdy fellows appeared silently and dragged
us violently down into their fearsome machine.
This brutally executed capture was carried out with lightning speed. My companions and I had no time
to collect ourselves. I don’t know how they felt about being shoved inside this aquatic prison, but as
for me, I was shivering all over. With whom were we dealing? Surely with some new breed of pirates,
exploiting the sea after their own fashion.
1 You are the professor. Write a report for the marine society after your release from the
submarine .
• how you and your companions fell overboard and came to be on the submarine;
• how you feel about the discovery of the truth about the ‘monster’;
• your concerns about the captain and the existence of such a vessel.
Base your report on what you have read in the Passage . Address all three bullet points.
Be careful to use your own words.
Up to 15 marks are available for the content of your answer, and up to 10 marks for the
quality of your writing.
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A1 facts and events leading to being on board the submarine
• attacked/rammed
• thrown/jumped overboard by collision [det. (initially think) ship hit by the 'tusks' of a
monstrous creature, at least three men fell overboard, Ned lands on “monster” straight away]
[dev. all three lucky/might have drowned]
• tried swimming/not possible to catch ship as it disappeared
[det. weighed down by water-logged clothes/sinking]
• found his friend [poss. dev first lucky break]
• shared swimming/worked together stayed afloat/saved energy [dev. couldn’t have done it
alone]
• received answer to calls for help
• couldn’t go on sinking again/exhausted [det. swallowed seawater, dev. nearly
drowned/cramps]
• saved by Ned/hauled onto surface of monster/sub by Ned
• rode on top of monster/sub all night (det. speed, hanging on to ring)
• taken below deck/into sub at daylight (8 crew, violence, noises before)
• who are they dealing with/who is the captain or person in charge of this sub
• piracy a possible use for vessel
• violence of crew is worrying/unnecessarily violent/hostile
• imprisoned why, what does captain want with them
• unstoppable/indestructible (exploiting) captain has power because of nature of the
vessel/no one knows where he/it is
• motives not well intentioned – attacked/rammed their ship, no concern for their safety on top
(allow questioning as to why it came back for them/whether there is a link to their mission to
find whale)
• irresponsible/dangerous behaviour
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Home Work - 1
I was lost. It was easy to lose one’s way on the moor, especially on a November afternoon when the
light was thickening and the landscape stretched the same unvariegated grey in all directions. I drove
along a narrow, empty road, looking for a road sign or any building which might contain an inhabitant to
give me directions. A fleeting, shadowy movement by the roadside reminded me of the tales of the
Beast of Bodmin Moor which had fascinated me as a local child. It was allegedly a vicious predator which
carried out sheep killings on a grand scale. An investigation by the Ministry of Agriculture in 1995 had
found ‘no verifiable evidence’ of foreign big cats in the area (although admitting that this did not prove
that they were not present), and had concluded that the sheep could have been attacked by native wild
animals. About four years later, an attempt to locate the beast from the air, using night vision goggles,
had also failed. The Bodmin Natural History Museum determined that a skull found in the area was of a
leopard, but it turned out to belong to an animal which had died outside Britain, and was probably part
of a leopard-skin rug which had been dropped into the river as a hoax. However, the sightings and
attacks had continued, and the local farmers were still convinced that the injuries to their livestock
proved it was a type of cat, and that its appearance was not consistent with it being a pony, wild boar or
large dog. In 1997, officials from a nearby zoo identified pawprints left in mud on the moor as the tracks
of a puma. A year later, a 20-second video was released which seemed to show big cats roaming nearby.
As I rounded the next bend, I saw a startlingly large, black feline cross the road with an unhurried,
sinuous, fluid movement. Its thick, sinewy shoulders suggested massive strength and speed, like that of
engine pistons. As it passed, it turned to stare at me and its great, yellow, black-slitted orbs were caught
in the headlights. I noticed its pricked, tufted ears and its short, coarse, raven-black coat before it
turned, raising and waving its curved snake of a tail as if making a victory salute. The spectral vision
dissolved into the bushes, leaving me with a thumping heart and the feeling that I had witnessed a
supernatural manifestation. A little further along I took a turning with a handwritten sign pointing to
‘Gables Farm’. I had to leave the car and cross a rickety, rotting footbridge over a rushing stream.
Another battered sign, nailed to a tree, bore the ominous words, ambiguously addressed: ‘Wild Big Cats
– Keep Out’. A shiny, weather-beaten man with tremendous whiskers and a crusty hat the colour of an
over-cooked pie appeared at the farm gate, carrying a rifle. When I explained I was lost and had just had
an unnerving experience, he took me into his kitchen and sat me down at a stained oak table while he
made me tea and talked about the beast. ‘You always know when it’s about. Rabbits and foxes
disappear and birds stop singing. If the ministry people knew anything about country life they’d know it
couldn’t be a dog. If it’s a dog there’s noise, and wool and mess everywhere. But a cat goes in to the kill
quickly, eats its fill, and slinks off.’ He told me that the beast owed him a thousand pounds for dead
livestock, and that other farmers had sold their flocks after losing so many sheep. His neighbour had
captured the beast on video, along with the telltale signs of four long scratch marks on the mauled
sheep. She had also found hairs which she’d sent off for analysis, but had received no result. He
continued: ‘The only reason to suppress the result would be to avoid panic. Another neighbour got hold
of a recording of a puma mating call, and we recognised the scream we hear at night. Everyone round
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here believes in the beast, even though we’re sceptical about most things and haven’t got time to waste
concocting fantasies. We don’t want the beast shot, but we do want it acknowledged and kept under
control so it doesn’t continue to destroy our livelihoods.’
Imagine you work for the Ministry of Agriculture. You have been sent to conduct a second investigation
as to whether there is large foreign cat activity on Bodmin Moor. Write a formal report on your findings.
In your report, you should comment on:
Base your answer on what you have read in Passage A and be careful to use your own words. Begin the
report as follows: Since the inconclusive investigation by the Ministry of Agriculture in 1995, reported
sightings of ‘big cats’ have continued.
Write between 250-350 words. Up to 15 marks are available for the content of your answer, and up
to 10 marks for the quality of your writing. [Total: 25]
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Home Work - 2
Read the passage given below and answer the question:
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for being positive or just pleasant. She’d hardly ever lost her temper, and had always managed a
smile. The other teachers had given in to stupid ideas about teaching and the curriculum.
Language and mathematics had been given little time and there were huge gaps in the children’s
knowledge, about science, for example. There was a good deal of sport, though most of that was
not about fitness. ‘They just loaf about,’ she thought. If you asked children what they wanted to
do, they’d always say ‘Watch a DVD’, but after a time that bored them too. So the days were
chaotic, and everyone lacked any sense of purpose. Soon they grew tired of each other’s
company.
Ms Jhabvala’s train of thought petered out at this point. Anyway her next class was waiting. She
opened the door and proudly hung up her new wooden sign.
Imagine you are a schools inspector and you have recently visited the school described in
the passage . You are not pleased with what you have observed.
Write your report, in which you:
•outline and explain the reasons for your dissatisfaction;
•make some recommendations to improve matters.
Base your report on what you have read in the passage.
Write between 250-350 words.
Up to 15 marks will be available for the content of your answer, and up to 10 marks for the
quality of your writing. [25]
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Marking Criteria for Question 3
Table A, Reading
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Table B, Writing: Structure and order, style of language
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