IELTS Writing Evaluation 

Report  

Candidate ID:​ 891150

Completion date:​ 2020-4-16

Examiner Name:​ Kate T

Estimated Band Scores 

Band Descriptors  Task 1  Task 2 

TA: 
(Task Achievement) 
7  7 
CC:  
(Coherence and Cohesion) 
7  7 
LR:  
(Lexical Resource) 
7  7 
GRA:  
(Grammatical Range Accuracy) 
6  6 
OVERALL:  
6.5  6.5 

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Task 1 

(TA) Task Achievement  

You have generally answered this well, but for higher marks, try to compare and
contrast all 3 groups in each year, instead of separating them (you did the first year
well but do the same for the other years). Also, don´t forget any details at all.

(CC) Coherence and Cohesion  

Logically  organises  information  and  ideas.  There  is  clear  progression  throughout. 
Uses  a  range  of  cohesive  devices  appropriately,  although  there  may  be  some 
under use. 

(LR) Lexical Resource 

Uses  a  sufficient  range  of  vocabulary  to  allow  some  flexibility  and  precision.  The 
candidate  uses  some less common lexical items with some awareness of style and 
collocation. There may be some occasional errors in word choice or spelling. 

(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy 

Some  complex  sentences  are  used  and  a  variety  of  tenses  and  structures,  with 
some mistakes. 

Task 2
(TA) Task Achievement   

You  have  good  points  here  but  ensure  you  state  very  clearly  at  the  end  of  the 
introduction  what  you  will  do  in  your  essay  and  summarize  everything  in  the 
conclusion. 

(CC) Coherence and Cohesion  

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 Paragraphing  is  fine  and  you  logically  organize  information  and  ideas.  There  is 
clear progression throughout. Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately  

(LR) Lexical Resource 

Uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision. The 
candidate uses some less common lexical items with some awareness of style and 
collocation. There may be some occasional errors in word choice or spelling. 

(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy 

Some complex sentences are used and a variety of tenses, but not always 
accurately 

 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

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FINAL SCORE: ​ 6
​ .5​ (but this could be a bit higher) 

In Conclusion: 
Your  English  is  good  and  you  have  good  points  too,  but  be  careful 
with  grammatical  mistakes  and  also  ensure  you  state  exactly  what 
you  will  do  in  your  essay  and  then  summarize  everything  in  the 
conclusion too.  

Best of luck, Kate 

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WRITING TASK 1
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

Percentage of UK people who consumed daily recommended amount of fruit and

vegetable in 2002, 2006 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make
comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.

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of healthy food (fruit and vegetables) in the years 2002, 2006 and 2010
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those rates experienced a downward trend in the final year. The female rate of
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Comment [1]: always give exact

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presented a rate of 22% in the beginning of the period. By the next year the trend Deleted: men

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the end of the period.
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The children’s rate showed a similar behavior as the adult female and male trends,
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marking 11% in the first year. Likewise, as other percentages this one grew steadily
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percentages. Comment [2]: always give all data

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Comment [3]: good but it is better to

(216 words) compare and contrast all groups in all
years, instead of separating them and
doing each individually. Say, as you
did, what all are in the first year, then
what all are in the second year and

WRITING TASK 2
then changes by last year for all
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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

In recent years, the family structure has changed, as well as family roles. What
are the changes occurring? Do you think these changes are positive or negative?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own
knowledge or experience.

You should write at least 250 words.

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family roles have as well. Is clear that the common family’s structure has changed
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since many years ago, due to women wanting to demonstrate that they are useful to
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Comment [4]: good but you also must

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Evidently, women’s roles have altered completely in the last 50 years. Equal your essay (both questions)
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conditions for men and women are the principle reason why women are playing a
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absent or prefer to live a different lifestyle from the original concept of the family. .
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Comment [5]: good but summarize all

your points here too
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