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Final Cover Letter 1
Final Cover Letter 1
Ten weeks ago, when I was asked to define writing, I was stumped. “Writing is just
putting words down on a page,” was the first thought that came to my mind. Without fully
understanding the reasons behind the choices I made for past writing assignments, I could not
think of writing as anything more than the action to construct prose. As I created writing projects
1 and 2, I developed a new understanding of writing. While reflecting on the definition of writing
and the choices I made in writing projects 1 and 2, I decided to revise the pieces, focusing on the
rhetorical situation and style. Through the revision process, I discovered how a defined
To begin, it is crucial to explain what I learned about the writing process from creating
and revising the writing projects. During the writing process, I became aware of the difference
between first order and second order thinking. In previous writing assignments, I always
received comments from peers that the structure of my sentences was confusing. The repetition
of these comments led to my belief that I had a crippling weakness in writing cohesively.
However, reading Elbow’s piece on second order and first order thinking helped me put this
issue into perspective. Elbow explains that “First-order thinking is intuitive and creative and
doesn’t strive for conscious direction or control” (Elbow, 1986, p. 55), ultimately describing the
structure of thinking while creating a first draft. This idea helped me understand that letting
yourself “word vomit” all of your thoughts onto the page is crucial in developing the
foundational arguments for a response to a prompt. The revision process is an example of second
order thinking where, “thinking is conscious, directed, [and] controlled” (Elbow, 1986, p. 55).
Thus, after laying the foundation for a paper in the first draft, revisions can be made using
second order thinking. From this, I realized that the comments about confusing sentence
structure served to imply I had not used second order thinking whilst creating a rough draft. This
framework of thinking in rough and final drafts helped me understand how the rough draft
In revising writing projects 1 and 2, I made conscious edits that focused on the rhetorical
situations. Before this course, I was not aware that every piece was speaking to a target audience
in response to a specific situation. The article by Boyd helped me understand that the rhetorical
situation is a response to “a given situation, one that is determined by the expectations of your
audience, implied or acknowledged” (Boyd, 2011, p. 100). Thus, in reviewing the writing project
drafts, I realized some elements I included were not fit to the setting or audience of the piece. In
writing project 1, the jargon and organization of the piece did not represent a typical group text. I
made edits to make the language informal and the texts shorter in length. For example, I changed
“high-levels” to “lots” to adhere to the expectations of the genre. If a single text was longer than
three sentences, I broke the information down into smaller messages, using multiple texts from
one author to convey the information. In writing project 2, I realized that the definitions of
academic jargon in the short story were not adequately explained to the audience. Thus, I
included images to describe the muropeptide and where it traveled in the mouse to serve as an
additional definition for the students. To account for the change, I included edits in the plot to
continue the flow of information and an additional paragraph in the reflective essay to explain
this choice. Through these revisions, I came to realize how significant the rhetorical situation is
After ensuring that the writing projects correctly corresponded to the rhetorical situation,
I focused on the stylistic elements of the pieces. For both pieces, I edited the sentences to be
more concise. Willams & Nadel explain the principles of writing concisely, pointing out that
“Readers think you write concisely when you use only enough words to say what you mean”
(Williams & Nadel, 1989, p. 132). This statement put into perspective the amount of unnecessary
words and phrases I had used in the writing project drafts. In writing project 1, I cut out filler
words and replaced phrases like “in order to” with “to”. I also included more emojis to express
one’s response to a text in the most concise manner. In writing project 2, I edited sentences in the
reflective essay to include the subject first, followed by the verb. I used the principles presented
by Williams & Nadel and attempted to keep the sentences around twenty words long. From this
conclusions. A misconception I had before completing this course was that introductions should
follow a pyramid structure. In class, I learned that an effective introduction focuses on one
aspect, leading the reader to the thesis statement. The conclusion acts to piece together the
information that was presented. In revising writing project 1 and the reflective essay of writing
project 2, I edited the introductions and conclusions to fit these requirements. With a structure to
construct an introduction and conclusion, the information in the piece can flow with purpose.
Overall, I enjoyed working with different genres and incorporating creativity in ways I
was not able to in past writing-focused courses. Through this unique writing process, I grew to
understand writing as a response to a situation, where the prose speaks to a target audience using
the conventions of a chosen genre. I plan to use this definition in future classes as a guide for
writing and revision processes. Understanding the elements of writing will allow me to reflect
upon the effectiveness of a piece and revise based on these essential concepts of writing.
Sincerely,
Julia Miyamoto
Works Cited
2, 87-101.
Elbow, P. (1986). Embracing contraries: Explorations in learning and teaching. New York:
Williams, J., & Nadel, I. (1989). Style: Ten lessons in clarity and grace. Glenview, IL: Scott,
Foresman.