ALS444: ACADEMIC WRITING FOR RESEARCH
PARAPHRASING 1
FURTHER PRACTICE 2:
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1 In Malaysia, prices of certain essential
goods, such as cooking oil, are controlled
by the government.
2 If population is to grow, the birth rate must
be higher than the death rate.
3 The candidate submitted his application at
the eleventh hour.
4 The Olympic Games began more than
2,000 years ago in Olympia, Greece:
however, women are forbidden to
participate in the events.
5 Pictures that showed the brutality of war
entered the living room of millions of TV
watchers on the nightly news.
6 Institutes of higher education should revise
their curricula to reflect contemporary
needs.
7 Mood-influencing drugs may be useful for
treating certain illnesses but are dangerous
if used for other purposes.
8 “The Green Revolution” of the 1960s
increased global food production by
introducing high-yielding varieties of crops.
9 The Indians who lived in Peru before the
discovery of the New World by Europeans
belonged to the Incan culture.
Further Practices 2 - 4
Monday 20 April 2020 (2 – 4 pm)
YOUR PHARAPHRASE TEXT
The government are the one who controlled the
certain necessary items expenses in Malaysia such
as cooking oil.
When the number of citizens is increasing, the
death rate must be lower than the birth rate.
The applicant handed in his forms at last minute.
Even though the Olympic Games started 20
centuries ago, women still not allowed to take part
in the events.
The daily night news displayed the scenes of the
brutal war on million people TVs.
Colleges and university shall reconsider to reflect
current needs by improving their curriculum.
Mood-enhancing drugs are harmful if used for
other intentions even though it is effective on
treating a particular disease.
World food output had risen after “The Green
Revolution” of the 1960s announce the high-
yielding varieties of crops.
The Indians who lives in Peru are apart of the
Incan culture before they were exposed to the
New World by the Europeans.
SAMPLE ANSWER
Cooking oil is one of the price-controlled items
in Malaysia.
There is population growth when the number of
births exceeds deaths.
At the last minute, the applicant handed in his
forms.
Women were not allowed to take part in the
Olympic Games which were first staged 20
centuries ago in Olympia, Greece.
Millions of TV viewers watched scenes of the
brutal war on the news every night.
To meet current needs, colleges and universities
have to improve their curriculum.
Mood-enhancing drugs may be used to treat
some ailments; however, they are harmful when
misused
World food supply had risen due to the
introduction of genetically enhanced crops
during the 1960 to 1970 period of “The Green
Revolution”.
Before America was discovered by the
Europeans, Peruvian Indians were from the Incan
culture.
10 According to research, hypertension is
about twice as prevalent in patients with
diabetes as in those without the disease.
FURTHER PRACTICE 3:
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1 Locally produced party drugs are not only
cheaper and more easily available, but they
also come mixed with a host of other
harmful ingredients. – Yip Yoke Teng.
“Party drugs that kill” , The Star N3, 23
November 2009.
2 Children of tense parents who lived in
polluted areas were far more likely to have
asthma than friends in the same
neighborhood. – BBC News. “Stressed
parents up asthma risk” , 21 July 2007.
3 Men live 8 to 10 years less than women.
They have higher rates of stress-related
disorders, alcoholism, car accidents and
suicides. In sum, the male role is hazardous
to men’s health. John Santrock.
“Adolescence”, 2001, McGraw-Hill,
London.
4 With the rising costs of airfares and the
increasing time it takes to get through
security at the airports, more and more
families are deciding to travel by car for
their vacation. Most of us with young
children are returning to the days we grew
up in when we travelled to most places by
car with our parents. – “10 tips when
travelling by car with children” by Jeff
Based on a research, person who has diabetes
disease are likely to have a high blood pressure
than those who don’t.
YOUR PARAPHRASE TEXT
Yip Yoke Teng (2009) state that party drugs
which produced by local people and are likely to
be found around the neighborhood area contains
dangerous elements.
BBC News (2007) reports that children of
stressed parents that lives in a polluted area has a
higher chance of getting asthma compared to
other parents and children who live in the same
place.
John Santrock (2001) writes that male survive
approximately a decade less than females. Male
are more likely to develop stress-related illnesses,
addicted to alcohol, involved in car accidents and
commit suicides than women. In conclusion, the
male role is dangerous to his well-being.
Most of parents with children prefer to travel by
cars for vacations just like the old days. This is
caused by the increasing price of air travel and
also the time-consuming to passed the strict
security checks at the airport (Jeff Kimbell, 2008).
According to research, the chances of getting
high blood pressure are two times more among
diabetics.
SAMPLE ANSWER
Yip Yoke Teng (2009) reports that locally made
designer drugs are cheaper and easily obtainable,
however, they are made of a concoction of
harmful substances.
Connie Wang in her 2007 article entitled
Stressed parents up asthma risk mentions that
kids of stressed parents living in polluted places
had a higher chance of getting asthma compared
to their peers residing in the same locality.
John Santrock (2001) writes that females survive
8 to 10 years longer than males. This is because
males are more prone to strain-related illnesses,
consume more alcohol, make up a big percentage
of traffic fatalities and are more likely to commit
suicide. In short, the male role is dangerous to
his well-being.
Kimbell (2008) points out that more parents with
toddlers are opting to travel by cars for vacations
just like in the good old days. This could be due
to expensive air travel as well as time-
consuming, stringent security checks at the
airports
 Kimbell (2008).

FURTHER PRACTICE 4:
Original Text:
Women from north America, western Europe and Australia/New Zealand who travel internationally are likely to be astonished and chagrined by the
way they are regarded in some overseas cultures, where ideas of appropriate feminine behavior can be quite different. In some countries, a woman who
outranks a man may not be treated that way by the hosts; they may still speak to and prefer to negotiate with the male, assuming he is her superior. In Asian
countries and Muslim countries women may find they are omitted from substantive conversation or overlooked in negotiations because of designated gender
roles. Sometimes, a woman can establish greater credibility by clarifying her title, role and responsibilities in writing before personal visit, but even this step
wont guarantee the desired effect.
-Adler, R,. & Elmhorst, J.M. (2008). Communicating at Work: Principles and Practices for Business and Professions. McGraw-Hill: Singapore. (p.46)

Your Paraphrase Text:

According to Adler and Elmhorst (2008), Caucasian women who travel throughout the world are often surprised by the treatment they get from some
Muslim and Asian nations because female are different due to different cultures. Even though the female may outrank her accompanying male counterpart, it
seems that foreign hosts are likely to negotiate terms with the male counterpart than the female counterpart. Women can ensure better treatment and
credibility by informing the host of their job designation prior to such a visit, but even that may not ensure the expected results.

Sample Answer:
According to Adler and Elmhorst (2008), Caucasian women are often surprised by the treatment they receive from some Asian and Muslim nations
due to the differing cultural ideas of female roles. Foreign hosts may prefer to negotiate terms with the male counterpart than the female counterpart even
though the female may outrank her accompanying male. Women can ensure better treatment and credibility by informing the host of their job designation
prior to such a visit, but even that may not ensure the expected results.