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Greeting:

Original Rewrite

The Director The Director

Blue Nursing Service Blue Nursing Service

207 Sydney Street 207 Sydney Street

West End West End

Date: 21 May 2009 21 May 2009

Dear Mr/Madam, Dear Mr/Madam,

Re: Ms Annette MacNamara, DOB: 14/06/1936 Re: Ms Annette MacNamara, DOB: 14/06/1936

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Goop points:

Weak points:

Date: (no need to write “Date” everybody knows it is a date)

Don’t leave blank line between “Dear Mr/Madam,” and “Re…….’

Purpose:

Original Rewrite

I am writing regarding Ms MacNamara, a 73- I am writing regarding Ms MacNamara, a

year-old Single pensioner women, who lives 73-year-old pensioner, who lives alone to
alone to request daily visits by the Blue request daily visits by the Blue Nurses and
Nurses and provide Support for her. provide Support for her.

Goop points:

Weak points:

Your purpose is unclear, you have asked the reader what you want from them, but you have
not provided the reason why you want visits etc????

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I am writing regarding Ms MacNamara, who was admitted for severe injuries after a fall. Your
daily visits for her showering and dressing of her wound would be highly appreciated.

Purpose should be clear to the reader like this. What was wrong with the patient + what you
want from the reader for the patient

2nd Body Paragraph:

Original Rewrite

Ms MacNamara was admitted in our Ms MacNamara was admitted to hospital on

hospital on 20/05/2009 following a fall
down while descending staires. An X-ray
was submitted and a fracture on her right
wrist confirmed, among with laceration on
her left hand which was caused by Broken
glass. She presents also a severe Bruising in
her right shoulder and her lower back.
Kindly note, a requirement of stitches was
provided.
20/05/2009 following a fall while
descending stairs. Her X-ray showed a
fracture of her right wrist, and there was a
laceration on her left hand which was
caused by a broken glass. She presents also
a severe Bruising in her right shoulder and
her lower back. Kindly note, a requirement
of stitches was provided.

Goop points:

Weak points:

Her X-ray showed (we can use showed/confirmed/revealed)

Her X-ray showed a fracture on her right wrist, and there was a laceration on her left hand
which was caused by a broken glass.

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(it look that the X-ray also showed laceration, ,,,, first write observation the X-ray)

She had a laceration on her left hand which was caused by a broken glass, and her X-ray
showed a fracture of her right wrist.

In the next two sentences, you did the same thing, first already told about X-ray, now again
talking about her symptoms.

Ms MacNamara was admitted to hospital on 20/05/2009 following a fall while descending

stairs. She had a laceration on her left hand which was stitched and there were also severe
bruising on her right shoulder and lower back. Her X-ray showed a fracture of her right wrist.
She was prescribed with Normisson 100mg for insomnia, if required, and 2 Panadol every 4
hours for pain.

3rd +- 4th Body Paragraph:

Original Rewrite

Ms MacNamara has a history of high blood
pressure which is currently controlled with
prescription of Karvea 150mg every morning
day. While her hospitalisaton, she was
treated by Normisson 100mg with 2 panadol
every 04 hours for insomnia and pain
persistent respectively.
Ms MacNamara has a history of high blood
pressure which is currently controlled with
Karvea 150mg daily in the morning. During
her hospitalisaton, she was treated with
Normisson 100mg and 2 Panadol every 04
hours for insomnia and pain respectively.

Goop points:

Weak points:

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We don’t need to make a separate sentence for medication, her relevant medications I
included with her current history and hypertension , I will include in past history etc.

Closing:

Original Rewrite

In view of the above, it would be greatly
appreciate if you can provide an assistance to
her Ms MacNamara in her daily showering
and the dress of her hand wound. In addition
to this, a social worker will be given her a visit
for organizing her meals on wheels and a
physiotherapy. Please note, she has her next
appointment for removing the stitches on
31/05/2009 at 10130 AM.
Please note, Ms MacNamara would require
your assistance in her daily showering and
dressing of her wound. In addition,
physiotherapy and a social worker will be
required to organise her meals on Wheels.
Also, she has her next appointment for the
removal of her stitches on 31/05/2009 at
10:30 AM.

Goop points:

Weak points:

her daily showering and dressing of her (make parallel sentence, on both sides of the “and” the
words should be similar, ing for or infinitives or nouns.

Look at my rewrite how smoothly the information flows and it is coherent and well organized.

Closing:

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 Original Rewrite

Thank you for agreeing to assist in this queries, Based on the above, I would be grateful if
if you should require further information, you could help her accordingly.
kindly Contact me.
Should there be any queries, please don’t
Yours sincerely, hesitate to contact me.

Charge Nurse Yours sincerely,

Princess Alexander Hospital Charge Nurse

Goop points:

Weak points:

I am writing regarding Ms MacNamara, who was admitted for severe injuries after a fall. Your
daily visits for her showering and dressing of her wound would be highly appreciated.

Ms MacNamara was admitted to hospital on 20/05/2009 following a fall while descending

stairs. She had a laceration on her left hand which was stitched and there were also severe
bruising on her right shoulder and lower back. Her X-ray showed a fracture of her right wrist.
She was prescribed with Normisson 100mg for insomnia, if required, and 2 Panadol every 4
hours for pain.

Please note, she lives alone and she recently moved to a small flat in new suburb. Her niece,
Stella Attois, lives and works in Southport and generally visits her once a fortnight. She is
hypertensive and takes Karvea 150mg daily in the morning.

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Please note, Ms MacNamara would require your assistance in her daily showering and dressing
of her wound. In addition, physiotherapy and a social worker will be required to organise her
meals on Wheels. Also, she has her next appointment for the removal of her stitches on
31/05/2009 at 10:30 AM.

Based on the above, I would be grateful if you could help her accordingly.

Should there be any queries, please don’t hesitate to contact me.

Yours sincerely,

Charge Nurse

(202 words)

You have missed her social history that is very important because this is the reason we are
asking for help.

Word count: 211

Overall Overall Grade: C
Score +
Plan well before you write the letter, organize information in
Advice paragraphs, write in a concise and professional way. Don’t
rush to write many letters and get corrected. Write this letter
again and send me.

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Individual scores:
Purpose

Description Grade Your

Score
Purpose of document is immediately apparent and 3
sufficiently expanded as required
Purpose of document is apparent but not sufficiently 2 1 or
highlighted or expanded hardly
2
Purpose of document is not immediately apparent and 1
may show very limited expansion

Description Grade
2. Content

Description Grade Your

Score
Content is appropriate to intended reader and 7
addresses what is needed to continue care (key
information is included; no important details missing);
content from case notes is accurately represented
Performance shares features of bands 5 and 7 6
Content is appropriate to intended reader and mostly 5
addresses what is needed to continue care; content
from case notes is generally accurately represented
Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5 4 3 or 4
Content is mostly appropriate to intended reader; 3
some key
information (about case or to continue care) may be
missing; there may be some inaccuracies in content
Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3 2
Content does not provide intended reader sufficient 1
information
about the case and what is needed to continue care;

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key
information is missing or inaccurate
Performance below Band 1 0

3. Conciseness & Clarity

Description Grade Your
Score
Length of document is appropriate to case and reader 7
(no irrelevant information included); information is
summarised effectively and presented clearly
Performance shares features of bands 5 and 7 6
Length of document is mostly appropriate to case and 5
reader; information is mostly summarised effectively
and presented clearly
Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5 4 3 or 4
Inclusion of some irrelevant information distracts from 3
overall clarity of document; attempt to summarise only
partially successful
Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3 2
Clarity of document is obscured by the inclusion of 1
many
unnecessary details; attempt to summarise not
successful
Performance below Band 1 0

4. Genre& Style
Description Grade Your
Score
Writing is clinical/factual and appropriate to genre and 7
reader (discipline and knowledge); technical language,
abbreviations and polite language are used
appropriately for document and recipient

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Performance shares features of bands 5 and 7 6
Writing is clinical/factual and appropriate to genre and 5
reader with occasional, minor inappropriacies;
technical language, abbreviations and polite language
are used appropriately with minor inconsistencies
Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5 4 4
Writing is at times inappropriate to the document or 3
target reader; over-reliance on technical language and
abbreviations may distract reader
Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3 2
The writing shows inadequate understanding of the 1
genre and target reader; mis- or over-use of technical
language and abbreviations cause strain for the reader
Writing is clinical/factual and appropriate to genre and 0
reader (discipline and knowledge); technical language,
abbreviations and polite language are used
appropriately for document and recipient

5. Organisation & Layout

Description Grade Your

Score
Organisation and paragraphing are appropriate, logical 7
and clear key information is highlighted and sub-
sections are well organized document is well laid out
Performance shares features of bands 5 and 7 6
Organisation and paragraphing are generally 5
appropriate, logical and clear; occasional lapses of
organisation in sub-sections and/or highlighting of key
information; layout is generally good language,
abbreviations and polite language are used
appropriately with minor inconsistencies
Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5 4 4
Organisation and paragraphing are not always logical, 3
creating strain for the reader; key information may not
be highlighted layout is mostly appropriate with some

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lapses

Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3 2

Organisation not logical, putting strain on the reader; 1
or heavy reliance on case note structure; key
information is not well highlighted and the layout may
not be appropriate
Performance below Band 1 0

6. Language

Description Grade Your

Score
Language features (spelling/punctuation/vocabulary/ 7
grammar/sentence structure) are accurate and do not
interfere with meaning
Performance shares features of bands 5 and 7 6
Minor slips in language generally do not interfere with 5
meaning
Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5 4 3 or 4
Inaccuracies in language, in particular in complex 3
structures, cause minor strain for the reader but do not
interfere with meaning
Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3 2
Inaccuracies in language cause considerable strain for 1
the reader and may interfere with meaning
Performance below Band 1 0

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