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A7-Effective Writing Feedback and Grading
Student’s Name
Institutional Affiliation
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Instructor
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Anne Student
Abstract
This paper aims to discuss the concept of emotion as related to cultural and gender
differences.
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Emotion
“Emotions are the cornerstones of our social worlds, affecting our interactions with
others in countless ways” (Soto, Levenson, and Ebling, 2005). The domain of emotion is
vast with many aspects to investigate and discover. Research suggests that there are basic
emotions of anger, disgust, fear, happiness, sadness, and surprise and also more complex
emotions such as contempt, embarrassment, pride, and shame (Tracy & Robins, 2008). Two
areas of interest in the literature culture (e.g., Tsai, Levensen, & McCoy, 2006) and gender
Culture
Culture refers to socially shared and transmitted patterns of ideas (values, norms, and
beliefs) that are instantiated in everyday practices, institutions, and artifacts (Tsai, Levenson,
& McCoy, 2006). Culture may play an important role in emotional regulation and
Tsai, Louie, Chen, & Uchida (2007) explored cultural factors that influence idea
affect. There are many ways that individuals within a culture can be influenced or biased.
One such way is young children being influenced that certain emotions are more acceptable
or more desired than others. The study focused on the central themes of children’s
storybooks and the emotions connected with the themes whether calm or active. American
children tend to prefer books connective with activity whereas children from Western
cultures tend to prefer books with a calmer demeanor. According to Tsai et. al.,
influence others (i.e., assert personal needs and change others’ behaviors to fit those
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many East Asian cultures, encourage their members to adjust to others (i.e., suppress
Whereas influencing others initially requires immediate action (e.g., asking someone
This may explain the findings that American children connect happiness with activity while
Continuing with the theme that different cultures express emotion differently is a
study by Soto, Levenson, & Ebling (2005) where they compared the emotional experiences
of Chinese Americans and Mexican Americans. It is believed that those in Chinese cultures
tend to moderate their emotions, while those in Mexican cultures tend to be more openly
moderation, and emphasize social harmony over individual expression” (Soto et. al., 2005, p.
154) and some believed that extreme emotions caused illness. Although Mexico is also
considered a collectivistic country, there are many emotional difference between the cultures.
In Mexico, relationships have high levels of affection and affect is more “openly accepted
and more highly valued” (Wikipedia, 2012). In fact, Murillo (1976, as cited in Soto et. al.,
2005) stated that in Mexican American culture, “It is through…an ability to experience, in
response to environment, emotional feelings and to express these to one another and share
them that one experience the greatest rewards and satisfactions in life” (p. 155). The
researchers results supported this notion. However, since the subjects live in America it
would be interesting to compare the results with participants living in China and Mexico.
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In a study by Tsai, Levenson, & McCoy (2006), the authors examined the degree to
which cultural and temperamental factors accounted for variation in emotional response
during an interpersonal task. They found that temperamental factors accounted for 0%-1% of
the variance while cultural factors accounted for 6%-7& of the total variance.
Gender
There are many theories as to the differences in emotion between males and females.
One theory is that of stereotypes. The stereotypical female has a more affiliative demeanor
and is more likely to show happiness while a stereotypical male tends to be more dominate
and more likely to show anger (Hess et. al., 2004). Women report more sadness, fear, shame,
and guilt, whereas men report more hostile emotions such as anger (Fischer, et. al, 2004).
Men and women also display emotion differently, as women smile more. It has been
suggested that lower social power is correlated with increased smiling. These stereotypic
expectations are in part a result of early socialization. For women, it is expected that they are
nurturers. They need the have an increased ability for interpersonal skills and non-verbal
men are expected to have more goal-oriented displays (Hess et. al.).
Fischer, et. al. (2004) were interested in examining cross-cultural variability of gender
differences in emotion by analyzing these differences in countries with different gender roles.
More specifically they looked at whether women were reporting more powerless emotion and
men reporting more powerful emotions would continue across cultures considering the
variability in gender roles. Overall they found this emotional pattern to be accurate with
some interesting gender differences. Men from countries that have high male empowerment
In a study by Hess et. al. (2004), the researchers looked at facial features, gender, and
emotional responses. They suggested that physicals facial features of men are disposed to
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dominance including a high forehead, square jaw, and thicker eyebrows. They looked at
three emotions: happiness, sadness, anger, and disgust and their results suggested that the
Conclusion
I found cultural and gender differences in the realm of emotion quite interesting.
Much of it makes sense in a commonsense kind of way. When we see a young boy showing
the stereotypical emotions of a girl, then he just doesn’t quite fit in with his peers and vise
versa. The emotional modeling by those around and the reinforcement of these stereotypes
begins when the individual is very young and becomes second nature.
concepts and key concepts and the text/s and and key points
ideas.
(56%–62%) (0–48%)
(63%–70%)
contains very few may have scholarly tone, APA APA style, and
sources somewhat
assignment. number of or
type of
(27%–30%) sources.
(24%–26%)
Instructor comments: 1. The student has a well-developed vocabulary, writes with depth and
2. Student should work on improving the few grammar and punctuation errors.
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Problems Identified
Issues identified from the student’s paper include punctuation errors, grammatical
issues, conflicting APA 7 and APA 6 format, vague sentences, difficulties in the choice of
words, and a hasty abstract. The student mixed up both APA 7 and APA 6 writing formats.
For instance, the cover page is written in APA 6 format while the body is written in APA 7
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format. For consistency of this paper, the student should use APA 7 format where the cover
page does not include a running head but should include a page number and a title head,
The paper has many punctuation errors, which include the omission of commas before
prepositions such as with and conjunctions such as while. Additionally, the student repeatedly
fails to correctly punctuate the abbreviation (et al.) by always placing a period after (et.),
which is wrong (Scales, 2018). Grammatical issues are also noted in the paper. For instance,
subject-verb agreement errors which make sentences confusing to read and understand.
Another grammatical issue that was identified is wrong word usage and wordy sentences,
Vague sentences that do not have a clear meaning are also noted in the paper. For
instance, the sentence “Tsai, Louie, Chen, & Uchida (2007) explored cultural factors that
influence idea affect.” is not explicitly expressed to give a clear understanding of what the
student is communicating. Lastly, the abstract is too short and hasty. The student has simply
paraphrased the title of the paper in sixteen words. An abstract should be a short paragraph of
at least six sentences that explain the primary purpose of the paper.
Grammar can sometimes be confusing and complex for some students, but it is crucial
and important that all students get to flawlessly use correct grammar both verbally and in
writing. There are several simple strategies that students can use to refine their grammar.
They include regular reading, having a grammar manual for referencing, for example, a
Regular reading and writing is one of the most effective strategy that has a 100%
efficacy in writing grammatically correct sentences with scanty errors. When students
normalize a reading habit, they reinforce accurate grammar and phrases in their minds. When
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reading, students can also solidify their fluency by reading out the words making them both
exceptional writers and distinguishable speakers (Singh, Singh, Razak, & Ravinthar, 2017).
Additionally, students enrich their vocabulary, making it easy for them to avoid wrong word
usage, wordy sentences and repetition of words common words and phrases.
whereby students re-read their written work to identify their grammatical mistakes. Usually,
our brain is faster than our hands, and therefore when writing, the mind perceives that one has
written all words in a sentence, but then one or two words could be missing or misspelled. It
is, therefore, a good practice for students to review their work to correct misspelled words,
fill out missing words, rephrase words and refine their points. When proofreading, a student
can speak out the words to increase the chances of identifying grammatical errors. Therefore,
it is important to note that correct grammar benefits both the writer and the reader. Readers
comprehend useful information from well-written publications and articles. Getting rid of
grammatical errors rewards readers with credible work that is well structured and with
coherent information.
Feedback to students is a salient part of the student assessment in the learning process.
It is a powerful tool and moderator that enhances a student’s progress. The main objective of
giving feedback in writing is to motivate students to improve their writing skills, which
include fluency and clarity (Kourgiantakis, Sewell, & Bogo, 2019). Specific objectives
include justifying to students that their work was reviewed, graded and delivered on time,
rewarding student work with the right grade, using comments to guide learners on what areas
to improve on and nurturing a student self-evaluation culture to monitor and review their
work.
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Highlighted comments on the student paper point out the major areas where the
student has a weakness. The comments set out hints which the student will use to enhance the
work. Therefore, the feedback will help the students to rethink and reflect on their work
hence improving their writing skills. Further, the feedback will help the students narrow
down and work on specific areas of improvement. For instance, this particular student needs
to polish grammar errors and punctuation errors only. In the process of self-evaluation,
students will gain satisfaction from their work because the approach is student-centered.
Additionally, students acquire an understanding of their own reading, writing and learning
Feedback will `promote communication between the teacher and students hence
facilitating the learning process. Consequently, the teacher-student dialogue will as well give
the teacher insight on the students' needs enabling the teachers to adjust their teaching
crucial and greatly encourages students to continuously manage and improve their skills.
References
Kourgiantakis, T., Sewell, K. M., & Bogo, M. (2019). The importance of feedback in
Journal, 47(1), 124-133.
Scales, J. (2018). LibGuides: Writing and APA Citation Resources: APA 7th.
Singh, C. K. S., Singh, A. K. J., Razak, N. Q. A., & Ravinthar, T. (2017). Grammar errors