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B1 022 Nguyen Thanh Huyen Actualtest1
B1 022 Nguyen Thanh Huyen Actualtest1
Hi Alex,
I take a different idea with you view on the topic of our presentation. It
seems to me that we can should talk about the thunderstorm instead of rain
forest . Not only we can make a powerpoint to talk about when it happens ,
how it dangerous it is, how it affects our life lives .. , but also it has many
pictures which (Khi dùng not only và but also thì chủ ngữ 2 vế phải tương
đồng) we can use many stunning pictures of it inon the Internet.
I’m afraid that I’m busy tomorrow because I should will take an exam.
Istead tomorrow , So I highly recommend we can( sau recommend nên +
should) should do it on Saturday. It’s suitable for our us because we don’t
have to go to school so we have free time to do homework together.
I think we can send our homework (cụm từ này k hợp văn cảnh, lạc đề)
give the presentation in the afternoon, which is a better choice, because we
can check our answer again in the morning and send present it in the
afternoon.
Huyen.
Nhận xét:
E đọc kỹ lại các lỗi sai a highlight và sửa trong bài, chú ý các lỗi sai trong cách
diễn đạt
E k cần cố gắng để sử dụng các từ khác hoàn toàn với bài viết email nếu e k
tìm được 1 từ nào đồng nghĩa với từ trong email gốc. Việc e cố gắng sử dụng
những từ mới mà k sát nghĩa với đề bài thì dễ bị lạc đề lắm.
Part2 :
I like shopping because it’s a good way to realease release stress. Buying
something new , I feel relaxed and it helps lift up my mood. If you go to a
shopping mall with your friend after a hard working day,it ‘ll be so
interesting. In On the other hand , going shopping make me run out of
money and sometimes, I waste money to buy something which isn’t suitable
for me . It’s so disappointed (từ này dùng để diễn tả cảm giác của con
người) disappointing.
The shopping centre do more and more ways to attract people . They have
big sale on special day or you can become to their VIP customer with many
benefits if you use a lot money to buy their products . In my opinion , you
should answer the question : “ Does it really important to me ? “ If the
answer is “yes” ,buy it .If not , you can save your money.
Nhận xét
Đoạn cuối e bị lạc đề. Đề bài ngta hỏi là “what could shopping centers do to
attract more people?” thì e lại viết lan man ở đâu đâu, đặc biệt là câu cuối.