Alo, Terence Andre C.

HUMSS 11-Y1-5A

Write a descriptive essay about any topic of your choice (it can be a place, event, people, object etc.)
and follow the given format below. If you need more space, use a separate piece of paper but don’t
forget to write your name and your section and attach it here in the module.

Title: How I express yourself using cars.

Item(s) that the author describes: A car (automobile)

Topic Sentence
The author’s general feeling about the item:

I love CARS. I love customizing them and driving as fast as I can in them. Some see it as a mode of transportation,
which it is. But for me, it is so much more. It’s a medium that I use to express myself and a medium for others to
convey feelings that can only be understood by those who also love cars. A sort of, Secret language.
Supporting Sentences
Background details about the item:

First came to fruition when Charles Benz invented the very first car in 1886 and became globally available in the
early 20th century. It was a revolution, giving people the freedom and ability to go long distances whenever they
want.

Descriptive details

A car is a vehicle which has a design can range anywhere from practical to personal but what every car has is 4
wheels, an engine, a transmission system and a crankshaft. Every part of a car is different from others, although
some cars may share the same main components but all of them are unique.

Author’s feelings

Cars have always had a special place in my heart. They’re a way for me to express my creativity and a way for me
to be unique. It’s like a character in a story that you can use to present your personality in a form and a way that
only those who understand your passion for cars can truly understand.

Concluding Sentence
Restated Idea

In conclusion, cars to me, is what fashion is to some people. A way for people to know me and a way for me to
know others. My dream car is a Corvette C8 customized to be an embodiment of who I am as a person.
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ASSESSMENT RUBRIC FOR THE WRITTEN ESSAY

ASSESSMENT EXCELLENT FAIR

VERY GOOD (4) GOOD (3)
CRITERIA (5) (2)
There is one clear, well- There is one clear, There is one The topic and
focused topic. Main well-focused topic. topic. Main ideas main ideas are
ideas are clear and are Main ideas are clear are somewhat not clear.
FOCUS & DETAILS
well supported by but are not well clear.
detailed and accurate supported by detailed
information. information.
The introduction is The introduction The introduction There is no
inviting, states the main states the main topic, states the main clear
topic, and provides an and provides an topic. A introduction,
overview of the paper. overview of the conclusion is structure or
ORGANIZATION Information is relevant paper. A conclusion included. conclusion.
and presented in a is included.
logical order. The
conclusion is strong.

The writer's purpose of The writer's purpose The writer's The writer's
writing is very clear and of writing is purpose of purpose of
there is strong somewhat clear and writing is writing is
evidence of attention to there is some somewhat clear unclear.
audience. His extensive evidence of attention and there is
knowledge or to audience. His evidence of
CLARITY
experience with the knowledge or attention to
topic is/are evident. experience with the audience. His
topic is/are evident. knowledge or
experience with
the topic is
limited.
The writer uses vivid The writer uses vivid The author usesThe writer uses
words and phrases. words and phrases. words that a limited
The choice and The choice and communicate vocabulary.
CHOICE OF placement of words placement of words clearly but theJargon or
WORDS seem natural, accurate seem inaccurate at writing lacks clichés may be
and not forced. times and seem variety. present and
overdone. detract from
the meaning.
All sentences are well Most sentences are Most sentences Sentences
constructed and have well constructed and are well sound
varied structure and have varied structure constructed but awkward, are
length. He makes no and length. He they have a distractingly
errors in grammar, makes a few errors in similar repetitive, or
structure/length. are difficult to
mechanics and/or grammar, mechanics
He makes understand;
SENTENCE spelling. and/or spelling, but
several errors in have
STRUCTURE AND they do not interfere numerous
grammar;
MECHANICS with understanding.
mechanics and/or errors in
spelling that grammar;
interfere with mechanics
understanding. and/or spelling
that interfere
with
understanding.
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