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Unit 8 - Critical Reading and Peer Review
Unit 8 - Critical Reading and Peer Review
Drafting is an important part of the writing process, but more important still is turning a draft into an
even stronger text. In this unit you will engage in a peer review process. That is, in a team with another
classmate you will both give feedback on that person's work and receive feedback on your own. The
feedback you receive will help you identify opportunities for improving your own essay, and the process
of providing feedback to your partner will help you develop as a critical and thoughtful reader. That in
turn will play a vital role in helping you develop as a writer. The online module this week also deals with
reading, from a somewhat different perspective. In class in this unit you will engage in peer review
discussions. After class you will take away your partner's work and follow a procedure for providing
comprehensive peer feedback. In the next class, you will have this feedback ready to hand to your
partner, and to talk to them about it in a consultation. By the end of this unit you will:
have thought about the process and purpose of peer review;
given and received face-to-face peer feedback;
completed and received written peer feedback;
have strengthened your understanding of academic writing style
On the next page is a checklist you can use to guide your peer feedback, and your discussion with your
partner next week. You do not need to focus on every item on the list (many may not be relevant) but
you should use it to prompt your thoughts about your partner's text, and to make sure nothing
important gets forgotten.
Depending on the nature of the issue you have identified, you may either insert a comment or make a
tracked change. If you are uncertain about a change you want to suggest, write your partner a comment
to that effect.
Tips: Peer Conferencing
Here are some guidelines to make the peer conference as productive as possible. This will be useful for
the consultation with your partner next week.
Be aware of time. Make sure that each text gets approximately the same amount of time for discussion
(your instructor will help by telling you when the discussion time is halfway up).
Prioritise. If you have comments about structure, content, the relationship among ideas, or more
abstract and subjective matters, prioritise them for the discussion. If you run out of time, you can
provide comments about word choice, spelling and other mechanical matters on your partner's
draft.
Be honest. Peer review is useless if it is no more than mutual praise. By criticizing your partner’s work,
you are demonstrating your respect for them as a person and a writer. If you don’t give any
feedback, or if you feedback is anodyne, you are failing your partner.
Be polite. Being critical does not mean being cruel. Remember that your classmate is in the same
situation you are, and try to be sensitive about their feelings.
Don't be too polite. Effective, constructive criticism will help your partner. Offer your best advice
directly.
Be specific. Vague, general comments—whether positive or negative—are difficult to respond to. By
giving examples and making specific claims, you can provide your partner with better help for
revising.
Listen. Don't just talk to your classmates. Listen to them. Try to find out what they are really trying to
achieve and offer advice which will help them reach their goal.
Check for understanding. Try rephrasing what you think your partner is telling you to find out if you are
really understanding him/her. You can use phrases such as "What I hear you saying is that. . . ."
Remember the positive. To revise your partner needs to know what currently works well in addition to
what can be improved.
You are the writer, and you have the right—and the responsibility—to decide what goes in your text.
However, you should read your partner's feedback carefully. If you decide not to adopt a particular
change, you may still want to consider the fact that, if your partner have difficulty with part of the essay,
another reader may as well. Ask your partner if you need clarification about any of the comments, and
then use the parts you find helpful in revising your essay.
Extract 1
According to recent research by the Mauna Loa Observatory (Suzuki 2015), the concentration of carbon dioxide in
the atmosphere has reached an all-time high. Following extensive research, scientists at the Mauna Loa
Observatory concluded that the CO2 level in the atmosphere is now 387 parts per million (ppm), which is a rise of
almost 40% since the industrial revolution and the highest for at least the last 650,000 years. The research,
published by the US National Oceanic and Atmospheric Administration, also confirms that carbon dioxide is
accumulating in the atmosphere faster than originally expected. The annual mean growth rate for 2007 was
2.14ppm - the fourth year in six to see an annual rise greater than 2ppm. From 1970 to 2000, the concentration
rose by about 1.5ppm each year but since 2000 the annual rise has leapt to an average of 2.1ppm.
Extract 2
The amount of carbon dioxide in the world's atmosphere is really high, I think that this is very worrying for scientists
and the general population. Apparently, the CO2 level in the atmosphere is now 387 parts per million
(ppm), which is a really big rise of almost 40% and the highest for at least the last 650,000 years! This research was
published by the US National Oceanic and Atmospheric Administration. These people also confirm that there is
more carbon dioxide in the atmosphere. It's accumulating faster than they thought it would. The annual mean
growth rate for 2007 was 2.14ppm, this is happening all the time now, it the fourth year recently to see an annual
rise greater than 2ppm. From 1970 to 2000, the concentration rose by about 1.5ppm each year but since 2000 the
annual rise has gone up an average of 2.1ppm.
http://www.mondofacto.com/study-skills/writing/how-to-use-academic-writing-style/01.html
Recent studies have shown that although many roses are indeed red, they can be found in a multitude
of colours including, pink, yellow and and orange (Dimmick 2005, Xi and Benson 2006). Violets, however, have
been shown to be almost always blue, with some exceptions noted in the excellent work carried out
by Titchmarch (2008). In addition, but not directly related to this, sucrose has been shown to produce a
sweet flavour when consumed my most adults (Martie 2001, Asrbar 1996). Although one would personally
describe the subject in question as a 'sweet', this is not scientifically sound as the subject is not, of course, an item
of confectionery.
Obviously, in this situation, academic style writing would not be the style of choice! However, it is a useful
demonstration of the type of style you should be aiming for.
To start with, look at the 20 sentences, and decide if each one is written in ‘good’ or ‘poor’ academic style.
As you review the answers, you might want to make a list of things to NOT include in your academic writing.
Avoiding these is a really easy way of making your writing look more academic and professional.