To: Nancy Myers

From: Karen Simonyan

Date: October 10, 2021
Subject: APLED 121-Chapter 5 – Achieving Audience Involvement-Pg. 115

ACHIEVING AUDIENCE INVOLVEMENT

1. Revise the following by adding pronouns and names.
a. The company will require further information before processing this request.

John, we will ask you to provide the new scheduling information before processing your request.

b. The application will consider completed if all required information will be provided.

Kevin, you must provide all the required information if you want your application to be
considered complete.

c. After applying for Financial Aid every student can have an opportunity to get free money.

Suzan, if you apply for Financial Aid, you can have an opportunity to get free money.

d. The Government will accept Green Card applications if Covid vaccine is provided.

Ann, your Green Card application will be accepted by Government if you provide your Covid
vaccine.

e. The father won’t buy a car for a son before he gets 16.

John won’t buy the dream car of his son until he gets 16.

2. Revise the following using positive words and pronouns.

a. We cannot lay your cable until you sign the attached waiver.

Once you have signed the attached waiver, we will lay your cable.

b. You shouldn’t accept his offer before knowing him very closely.

When you know him closely, you should accept his offer.

c. The bank can’t give you a loan as you don’t have a permanent job.

If you have a permanent job, the bank will give you a loan.
d. He couldn’t access your online documents if he didn’t know your password.

After he knew your password, he could access your online documents.

e. The company doesn’t hire you as you still don’t have a specific certification.

Once you have a specific certification, the company will hire you.