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Extended Narrative Reflection
Extended Narrative Reflection
Extended Narrative Reflection
Diana D’Aloisio
DuFresne
10 LC
November 8, 2022
Recently I wrote an Extended Narrative about how I got into Golf. I chose to write about
this because it is something that has impacted my life greatly and a skill I want to carry as I get
older. In my extended narrative, I liked how I incorporated similes like “I told my brother, and he
was happy as a reprieved thief.” and “I am scared like a jackrabbit that has heard the howl of a
wolf.” I included this in my narrative because it gives the reader a better understanding of how I
feel and an example of showing instead of telling. I liked how I included what I learned from this
sport and how I will carry it on in the future. To me, every moment in your life teaches you a
lesson and this sport has taught me plenty of things that I will carry for the rest of my life. In my
narrative, I also included the three types of dialogue which are dialogue first, sandwich dialogue
and dialogue last like, “Yeah, I remember you mentioning that, but didn’t you say tryouts are
next week? I have no experience.” I said -- I than say “I'll think about it.” “Ladies, may I have
your attention” Coach Schoonover shouts “We will split you guys into groups of 5 and you will
play 9 holes." In my narrative I could have improved on dialogue. I kept saying “said” after each
time a person said something because I did not want to use too many alternatives like “shouts,
yells” but the said got too repetitive. My extended narrative was lengthy which is not bad, and I
am proud of my writing, but some details were not needed. I struggle with the number of details I