4. Describe a memorable birthday celebration.

I didn't have many birthdays, actually I had just 4 birthdays in all my life, I'm almost 26
years old, so isn't usual celebrate my birthday. My memorable birthday resumes a two
birthdays, one when I was 18 years old the second when I was 24 years old.

First all, I write about my birthday of 18 years. It was a simple celebration with my family,
boyfriend, friends at school and sister's friends. The menu was chicken cream and didn't have
cake I guess, I didn't remember very well about these details. I remember my friends was
eating and then we are going to the square to talk and have fun. I had just entered at
university and get a boyfriend.

In relation the my birthday of 24 years old, I was very happy because was my first
surprise birthday and in the morning my fiance send me a basket with food and gifts. Then at
night he taked along me to his house and there my mother-in-low and my sister-in-low was
waiting for me to celebrate. There was a beautiful pink cake fulled butterflies and to eat had
salties of party. I still keep the butterflies that was in my cake and the cup that comes in my
basket. I love maintain memories about important days to me.

The correction:

I didn't have many birthdays, actually I had just 4 birthdays in all my life, I'm almost 26
years old, so isn't usually celebrate my birthday. My memorable birthday resumes a two
birthdays, one when I was 18 years old the second when I was 24 years old.

First of all, I write about my birthday of 18 years. It was a simple celebration with my
family, boyfriend, friends at school and sister's friends. The menu was chicken cream and
didn't have cake I guess, I didn't remember very well about these details. I remember my
friends was were eating and then we are going to the square to talk and have fun. I had just
entered at university and get got a boyfriend.

In relation the Concerning my birthday of 24 years old, I was very happy because was
my first surprise birthday and, in the morning, my fiance send me a basket with food and gifts.
Then at night, he taked took along me to his house, and there my mother-in-loaw and my
sister-in-loaw was were waiting for me to celebrate. There was a beautiful pink cake fulled
butterflies and to eat had salties of the party. I still keep the butterflies that was were in my
cake and the cup that comes in my basket. I love to maintain memories about important days
to me.
The text with a correction:

I didn't have many birthdays I had just 4 birthdays in all my life, I'm almost 26 years old, so
isn't usually celebrate my birthday. My memorable birthday resumes two birthdays, one when
I was 18 years old the second when I was 24 years old.

First of all, I write about my birthday of 18 years. It was a simple celebration with my
family, boyfriend, friends at school and sister's friends. The menu was chicken cream and
didn't have cake I guess, I didn't remember very well about these details. I remember my
friends were eating and then we are going to the square to talk and have fun. I had just
entered university and got a boyfriend.

Concerning my birthday of 24 years old, I was very happy because was my first surprise
birthday and, in the morning, my fiance send me a basket with food and gifts. Then at night , he
took along me to his house, and there my mother-in-law and my sister-in-law were waiting for
me to celebrate. There was a beautiful pink cake fulled butterflies and to eat had salties of the
party. I still keep the butterflies that were in my cake and the cup that comes in my basket. I
love to maintain memories about important days to me.

The best way:

I haven't had many birthdays I've only had 4 birthdays in my entire life, I'm almost 26 so I don't
usually celebrate my birthday. My memorable birthday boils down to two birthdays, one when
I turned 18 and the other when I turned 24.

First, I'm going to write about my 18th birthday. It was a simple celebration with my family,
boyfriend, school friends, and my sister's friends. The menu was cream of chicken and there
was no cake I think, I don't remember those details very well. I remember my friends ate and
then we went to the square to talk and have fun. I had just entered university and found a
boyfriend.

Regarding my 24th birthday, I was really happy because it was my first surprise birthday. In the
morning my fiance sent me a basket with food and gifts. So, in the evening, he took me to his
house, and there my mother-in-law and sister-in-law were waiting for me to celebrate. There
was a beautiful pink cake full of butterflies and snacks from the party and dinner to eat. I still
have the butterflies that were on my cake and the cup that came in my basket. I love keeping
memories of important days for me.