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Communicating Information and Ideas Writing
Communicating Information and Ideas Writing
Accredited
GCSE (9–1)
Candidate Exemplar Responses
ENGLISH
LANGUAGE
J351
For first teaching in 2015
Component 01:
Communicating
information and ideas
Section B (Writing)
Version 1
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GCSE (9–1) English Language Candidate Exemplar Responses
Contents
Introduction 3
Script A
Exemplar Response 4
Commentary 8
Script B
Exemplar Response 9
Commentary 11
Script C
Exemplar Response 12
Commentary 14
Script D
Exemplar Response 15
Commentary 18
Script E
Exemplar Response 19
Commentary 22
Script F
Exemplar Response 23
Commentary 26
Script G
Exemplar Response 27
Commentary 28
Script H
Exemplar Response 29
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Introduction
This resource has been produced by a senior member of
the GCSE (9–1) English Language examining team to offer
teachers an insight into how the assessment objectives
are applied. It has taken the two high mark questions
from the sample question paper and used them to
illustrate how the questions might be answered and
provide some commentary on what factors contribute to
overall levels.
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SCRIPT A
Write a speech for your class in which you argue that violence is not the solution to conflict
between people.
In your speech you should:
• explain why peaceful solutions are better than violent ones
• give some examples to support your argument
• convince your audience that violence does not solve conflict. [40]
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Commentary
AO5: Level 6; AO6: Level 4
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SCRIPT B
Write a speech for your class in which you argue that violence is not the solution to conflict
between people.
In your speech you should:
• explain why peaceful solutions are better than violent ones
• give some examples to support your argument
• convince your audience that violence does not solve conflict. [40]
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Commentary
AO5: Level 5; AO6: Level 4
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SCRIPT C
Write an article for a teenage magazine which gives advice to young people on how to cope
with the pressures and stresses of modern life. You are not required to include any visual or
presentational features.
In your article you should:
• identify some of the pressures and stresses that young people face
• suggest why these issues may be difficult to deal with
• explain some of the ways in which these can be managed. [40]
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Commentary
AO5: Level 4; AO6: Level 3
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SCRIPT D
Write an article for a teenage magazine which gives advice to young people on how to cope
with the pressures and stresses of modern life. You are not required to include any visual or
presentational features.
In your article you should:
• identify some of the pressures and stresses that young people face
• suggest why these issues may be difficult to deal with
• explain some of the ways in which these can be managed. [40]
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Commentary
AO5: Level 4; AO6: Level 3
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SCRIPT E
Write a speech for your class in which you argue that violence is not the solution to conflict
between people.
In your speech you should:
• • explain why peaceful solutions are better than violent ones
• • give some examples to support your argument
• • convince your audience that violence does not solve conflict. [40]
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Commentary
AO5: Level 3; AO6: Level 2
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SCRIPT F
Write an article for a teenage magazine which gives advice to young people on how to cope
with the pressures and stresses of modern life. You are not required to include any visual or
presentational features.
In your speech you should:
• identify some of the pressures and stresses that young people face
• suggest why these issues may be difficult to deal with
• explain some of the ways in which these can be managed. [40]
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Commentary
AO5: Level 3; AO6: Level 2
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SCRIPT G
Write a speech for your class in which you argue that violence is not the solution to conflict
between people.
In your speech you should:
• explain why peaceful solutions are better than violent ones
• give some examples to support your argument
• convince your audience that violence does not solve conflict. [40]
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Commentary
AO5: Level 2; AO6: Level 1
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SCRIPT H
Write a speech for your class in which you argue that violence is not the solution to conflict
between people.
In your speech you should:
• explain why peaceful solutions are better than violent ones
• give some examples to support your argument
• convince your audience that violence does not solve conflict. [40]
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Commentary
AO5: Level 1; AO6: Level 1
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