Reflection when I was young poem

Recently I wrote a poem about a place that I went to. And overall I did a pretty good job on

describing some sensory details. But I think I could have added more depth to the stanzas. And I

think that I could have also compared the sensation and sensory details to other things. I also

think that my stanzas could have been more detailed and longer. As well as I could have

probably had better grammar in my writing. Another thing I could have done was adding people

that I was with to the story to make it more interesting and to paint a better picture. I think that a

part that was really good was when I said “on the rides as they dropped from the top. Screams so

loud they echoed of of walls.” I think that I had a very good sensory detail. In that stanza. A spot

where I could have gotten more detailed was when I said “I remembered smelling the thick smell

of barbecue In the air as I walked through all the restaurants.” I could have specified what

restaurant and what type of barbecue was being grilled. I think that I could have also refined the

word usage for sensory details and, explain them better.