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On Romans Essay
On Romans Essay
In the two-paragraph introduction, Roman tells an anecdote. He uses metaphors and images. He
then gives an idea about what his father looks like. By the introduction, his main idea might be that his
father is a super-hero and his active style of life still “incites” (inspires?) him.
I think that in the body paragraph Roman is listing the aspects of his father he would like to
develop in the next versions of the essay. He mentions his being independent, motivated, persistent,
with solid knowledge. There is an idea among this list that needs to be clarified. I quote: “Sometimes it
seems like something unreal to know everything to can do everything.” Van quotes a couple of his
father´s favorite phrases as an illustration, which I find an excellent idea to include in the essay.
In the conclusion paragraph, Roman provides a general idea about parenting, following the
guidelines for the essay. Then, he states we take time to understand how our parents accompany us,
help us improve and protect us. The second and third assertions relate to what he includes in the body
paragraphs, but does not connect them back explicitly to the main idea in the introduction.
I found the structure of the essay clear, although the conclusion, as it does not “go back” somehow