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Eliminating Wordiness and Redundancy
Eliminating Wordiness and Redundancy
Redundancy
Introduction Good writers know that every word counts. When revising your writing:
• Use fewer words. Edit your writing to remove unnecessary words and phrases.
Wordy: This paper will focus on the Great Migration and the reason
This
Delete Phrases That why it had a huge impact on urban life in the United States.
Don’t Add Meaning Concise: The Great Migration had a huge impact on urban life
in the United States.
Wordy: During the time that World War I broke out, factories in
During
Use One Word in Northern cities had a need for more workers.
Place of a Phrase Concise: When World War I broke out, factories in Northern cities
needed more workers.
• Delete repeated information. Delete or combine words and phrases that repeat ideas.
Repetitious: By the end of 1919, a million African Americans had left,
leaving the South for cities and urban areas like Chicago,
Avoid Repeating
New York, and Detroit.
Words or Ideas
Better: By the end of 1919, a million African Americans had left the
South for cities like Chicago, New York, and Detroit.
Guided Practice Revise each sentence to eliminate wordiness and repeated ideas.
L9: Comparative
L10: Eliminating Wordiness
and Superlative
and Redundancy
Adjectives and Adverbs 241
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Common
Common Core
Core Practice
Practice Lesson 9
For numbers 1–4, choose the answer that best revises the Answer Form
sentence without changing its meaning. 1 A B C D
2 A B C D
3 A B C D
1 African-American people and families Number
4 A B C D Correct 4
wanted to live free from poverty
and violence.
A African-American people and 3 Sometimes one family member moved
families wanted to live free first; later the whole family was
from violence. reunited together.
B African-American families were A Sometimes one family moved; later
free from poverty. they were reunited together.