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Some people believe that children should be allowed to

stay at home and play until they are six or seven years
old. Other believe that it is important for young children
to go to school as soon as possible . What do you think
are the advantages of attending school from a young
age?
#people #children #home #six #seven #years #school #age

Today psychologists recognize that child psychology is

unique and complex. Since childhood plays such an
important role in the course of the rest of life parents believe
that proper care of children to be taken during their
development. So most of the parents think that children
should be allowed to stay at home and play until they are six
or seven years old. While others believe that it is important
for young children to go to school as soon as possible. There
are many pros and cons related to this issue.

Mostly, parents are worried about their kids over all

development. Because, most of the teachers in play groups
are not very attentive and due to which many children get
neglected. It is good to identify these minor issues, that kids
face in their young age and relevant steps should be taken
to cure them. I would like to share an experience from my
past. I have nephew, who was suffering from a learning
disorder. In his initial years of the institute, he used to have
problems while writing. He often wrote alphabets and words
in wrong a manner. His writing pattern was weird and difficult
to understand. Due to, this disorder, he scored very less and
his performance kept falling. His parents were tensed and
completely clueless. They did discuss with school teachers
about his performance, but still no was no one was able to
identify the correct reason. In fact, they said that with time his
he will improve on his own. As he grew nothing changed in
his behaviour and eventually they took him to a child
psychologist. After few counselling sessions, they got to
know he was suffering a learning disorder that is dyslexia.
Finally, they got to know why their son not able to cope up
with his classes. As said by the great Athenian philosopher
Plato, "Ignorance, the root and stem of all evil".

But, there are some exceptions as well. Some parents do

believe that not psychological, but socially and mental
growth is also important. Firstly, they need exposure in order
to become stronger and active. In school children get to
participate in both mental and physical games. Apart, from
these activities, social interaction is very important.
Sometimes, children learn more quickly from their
surroundings. Accordingly, they become good at multitasking
and grasp rapidly. Moreover, children, analysing their
environment using mental symbols, which basically include
words and images that they use in their day to day life for
different objects, events and situations. For example, children
are made to indulge in drawing activities, playing puzzles,
making creatures from clay and building blocks. By
conducting such classes help understand a child's
psychology and ability to learn.

In short, kids need nature a nurture parallel so that they

blossom like a flower. They should understand, their children
need the right environment, facilities and resources. By
staying at home, only few parameters can be monitored, but
for the factors one to need proper mentors. Parents can
intervene in their child's curriculum on a daily basis, to keep a
check, on the progress. Therefore, a balance need to be
maintained between mental and emotional aspects for a
healthy progress.

Submitted by shreya1990s on Fri Jun 05 2020

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