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Thesis Statement: As far as I am agitated, university students should be motivated to take part-time
jobs because by doing this, more likely they can become more financially liberated, acquire new
experiences in daily lives and most importantly learn to balance their study and work making new
friends and learning doing social networking

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Topic sentence 1: Learn the value of money

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Supporting idea 2: relief of financial burden

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Topic sentence 2: accumulation of work experience

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Topic sentence 3: time management skill

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Supporting idea 2: prevents from being involved in illegal deeds

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Conclusion

Restatement of the Thesis: From the discussion above, the benefits that a student gets on deciding to
engage in part-time jobs are endless. The attractive thing is that the cons attached to part-time jobs for
university students are malleable depending on the mentality and focus of the students in their
educational life and personal life.

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Introduction

Innumerable university students are now doing part-time jobs on or off campus. This sensation has now
provoked wide public concern. Some cynics proclaim that students attend universities to gain
knowledge and study. Moreover, what they need to do is to drill their brain, and not focus on making
money. However, these people fail to perceive that part-time jobs while taking part in university can
bestow students with so much more than just income. As far as I'm agitated, university students should
be motivated to take part-time jobs because by doing this, more likely they can become more financially
liberated, acquire new experiences in daily lives and most importantly learn to balance their study and
work making new friends and learning doing social networking

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On top of that, work experience gained from a part time job can grow the statue of the student even
before he finishes his graduation. Experienced earning is always valuable regardless of whether the field
is relevant to one's career or not. New things can be learnt from jobs which allow students to have more
knowledge than average students. It can be said that knowledge on the particular things learnt from the
particular job can be a deciding factor in a job interview of a vaunted company. It slicks the burden of
learning things that might be essential to a student later on. Due to the part time job students get a
boost in their CCA (Co-Curricular Activities) almost all offices favor work experiences. Research shows
that more than 70% of the offices in Singapore, Malaysia and Russia consider working experiences as an
essential factor to get recruited. Offices prefer working experiences because it raises punctuality and
management skills. People start to rely on the description of people with working experiences. For
students to gain this, taking up a part time job is the perfect way. Attributes of an experienced person is
valued in addition to,a gain in praises from family and friends. In general, students become more
productive when they do part time jobs. Their naive sides diminish, with an increase of the things learnt
from the new job. The time in most cases would probably be if part time jobs are not taken up.

Conclusion

To sum it up, it is evident that there are tons of many more advantages that come out if students of
universities get involved in part time jobs. The advantages that a part time job provides outweigh every
other way to earn experience. From the discussion above, the benefits that a student gets on deciding to
engage in part-time jobs are endless. The attractive thing is that the cons attached to part-time jobs for
university students are malleable depending on the mentality and focus of the students in their
educational life and personal life. Part time jobs scintillates a fairly homogeneous mixture of experience,
income, knowledge, punctuality and productivity.
Innumerable university students are now doing part-time jobs on or off campus. This sensation has now
provoked wide public concern. Some cynics proclaim that students attend universities to gain
knowledge and study. Moreover, what they need to do is to drill their brain, and not focus on making
money. However, these people fail to perceive that part-time jobs while taking part in university can
bestow students with so much more than just income. As far as I'm agitated, university students should
be motivated to take part-time jobs because by doing this, more likely they can become more financially
liberated, acquire new experiences in daily lives and most importantly learn to balance their study and
work making new friends and learning doing social networking

In this modern era maximum parents complain that they are spending lakhs of money on their children
in means of studies but they are not aware of the value of money. Part time jobs help earn extra money
in fact it is also said to have fulfilled students' tuition fees. It is an economical solution to every aspect in
students' lives. With a part time job, the pocket money once needed from the parents can be gained
bundled with enigmatic benefits. By doing part time jobs, students can release their parents' financial
burden if the believe that they are mature and smart enough to do so. Though the part time jobs
salaries are not quite enough for paying up full tuition fees of a private university so in that case parents
may contribute but the daily pocket money can be earnt from part time jobs, isn't it? We students can
slighter the financial burden off our parents with our small efforts and concern. Consequently, students
would understand the worth of money when they earn it by their hard work and spend it in the right
way.

On top of that, work experience gained from a part time job can grow the status of the student even
before he finishes his graduation. Experienced earning is always valuable regardless of whether the field
is relevant to one's career or not. New things can be learnt from jobs which allow students to have more
knowledge than average students. It can be said that knowledge on the particular things learnt from the
particular job can be a deciding factor in a job interview of a vaunted company. It slicks the burden of
learning things that might be essential to a student later on. Due to the part time job students get a
boost in their CCA (Co-Curricular Activities) almost all offices favor work experiences. Research shows
that more than 70% of the offices in Singapore, Malaysia and Russia consider working experiences as an
essential factor to get recruited. Offices prefer working experiences because it raises punctuality and
management skills. People start to rely on the description of people with working experiences. For
students to gain this, taking up a part time job is the perfect way. Attributes of an experienced person is
valued in addition to,a gain in praises from family and friends. In general, students become more
productive when they do part time jobs. Their naive sides diminish, with an increase of the things learnt
from the new job. The time in most cases would probably be if part time jobs are not taken up.

To boot, doing a part time job enables students to acquire time management skills in the sense that they
value every single minute of their life and use it expeditiously. Furthermore, keeping students busy all
the time acquires a great important role so that they do not get involved in any kind of bad or illegal
deeds. As we all know that at a young age people have a lot of naive desires such as trying different
kinds of drugs and all. If students are busy doing work and studies all the time then they will gain the
maturity not getting involved in any kinds of illegal deeds. In order to keep up in both their study and
work they have to be more ambitious and self-motivated. And once the students accomplish this they
also attain the sense of performance. They become more self-assured in themselves and more
undaunted for the challenges that the future may hold. .

To sum it up, it is evident that there are tons of many more advantages that come out if students of
universities get involved in part time jobs. The advantages that a part time job provides outweighs every
other way to earn experience. From the discussion above, the benefits that a student gets on deciding to
engage in part-time jobs are endless. The attractive thing is that the cons attached to part-time jobs for
university students are malleable depending on the mentality and focus of the students in their
educational life and personal life. Part time jobs scintillates a fairly homogeneous mixture of experience,
income, knowledge, punctuality and productivity.