Writing Feedback Cover Sheet 2: SECOND DRAFT

Student
Name:
number:

6/7/2022
Class: Teachers: Date:
Word 437
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Click on the box to ☒ Changes I made after peer feedback:

cross it
I have used Arial. ☒ Response - ideas ☒
I have used font size 12 ☒ Organisation ☒
I have double spaced ☒ Grammar ☒
Vocabulary ☒

Student self – assessment: Select Good OK or need to improve for each area

Response & Revision Grammar

A full description Click here to select Range of structures Click here to select

Correct sentence
Used teacher Click here to select
structure, subject Click here to select
feedback to improve verb agreement
and punctuation
Structure & Planning Vocabulary
Logically ordered,
cohesive (linking Click here to select New vocabulary Click here to select
words, pronouns)
Made and followed a Click here to select
Spelling & Word Click here to select
plan. Forms

I confirm this is my own work……………………………………………………

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