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Emma Keefe - 2022 American Dream Essay Template Rubric
Emma Keefe - 2022 American Dream Essay Template Rubric
Emma Keefe
Mr.Smith
Junior English
Come to America we have perfect houses, perfect jobs and perfect lives, however see how long it
takes to achieve the word “ perfect” in all your aspects in life. The “American Dream” was
essentially created in 1776. America today has changed over the span of 246 years, see how
accessible it is today. The American Dream is inherently difficult to achieve for many people
because of low paying jobs while providing for large families and also the discrimination of
minorities.
Both Firefighter Works 3 jobs to support his family broadcasted by ABC News and
House on Mango Street by Sandra Cisneros reveal how both poems are about financial struggle
in living in America. A News video that was broadcasted was about the struggles of financial
income in the 21st century reportedly exclaims, “Chris Smith works as a firefighter and as a
paramedic in two different towns to support his wife and their children” (ABC News). As a Front
line worker, Chris doesn't make enough to meet ends meet. Being a firefighter is a full time job,
they risk their lives day on and day out for communities however this job wasn't enough to
support chris family. Chris after working 18 hour shifts then goes to a besiding town to be an on
the clock EMT. Similar to this, The house on Mango Street demonstrates a family's financial
struggle to care for their 4 kids. Cisneros remarks, “There are stairs in our house, but they're
ordinary hallway stairs, and the house has only one washroom. Everybody has to share a
bedroom—Mama and Papa, Carlos and Kiki, me and Nenny” (Cisneros). This family wasn't
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the only family fighting to keep their heads above the water. This family wasn't the only family
sharing a one bedroom apart for a family of six. Keeping financial stability in America is a very
difficult task, no matter what area you are in. With inflation hitting harder and harder every day it
makes it almost impossible to spend what was used to spend on everyday products. Financial
inconveniences is a common problem in the U.S, throughout the decades the financial structure
in classes is growing more rapidly than predicted. No matter the city or town you live in there
will always be a family around the corner fighting to make ends meet, in order to be able to turn
Both the poem America in 4 minutes by Bredan Welligton and the Excerpt Op:Ed John
Cho by John Cho explore the topic of highs and lows of the race in America. Wellington talks
about this in his poem and states, “This is the home of the brave, home of the wealthy, rich home
of the paid. It is also home of the homeless, the hurt and the deceived” (Wellington).Wellington
styates in his poem that there are the deceived in America, referring to the colored and the
minorities that here; They are the ones who struggle constantly because of being misjudged
which is always dragging them back down just when they start to rise up. The other side is
people looking in, the ones who drive to live the fairytale life. They know they will always be the
ones looking in, never the ones living in the Glass room, these are the white, happy families that
live a perfect life with no discrimination in their life. Similar to Wellington, John Cho is an
Asian-American himself; he describes the contrast between the optimistic and pessimistic
outlooks on the country today. Cho mentions, “In some ways, I began to lead a life devoid of
race. But I’ve learned that a moment always comes along to remind you that your race defines
you above all else” (Cho). Cho is speaking his experience to the world of how became an actor
and this game almost brought kindness out of people towards himself. However he never felt that
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he would get the same kindness that he really desired. Cho is faced with racial differences with
the community around him. Like iI said above, Cho is the perfect example of an immihgrant who
is finally on their way up and who gets shot back down by the reminder of their race from the
Wellington is describing snips of those environments a lot of people face each day being
a citizen in America. America has two sides, the glamorous and perfect side, and the diminished
and dissolved side. Both Excerpts that were referenced expressed both sides to the most bare
truth. The American dream was not made to be easily “accessible”, financially it was merely
reachable for the middle class, and even to be able to drive to have the life if you were not
“white” in America it will make this dream even harder to come to life. America is not perfect,
yes there was an ideal or perfect image built for around the world that we are “Home of the free
& brave” and we quite are, however no one dives beneath the surface to crack open what it takes
Work Cited:
Cisneros, Sandra. The House on Mango Street. 2nd Vintage Contemporaries ed., 25th
Cho, John. “Coronavirus Reminds Asian Americans Belonging Is Conditional.” Los Angeles
https://www.latimes.com/opinion/story/2020-04-22/asian-american-discrimination-john-c
ho-coronavirus.
“Pennsylvania Firefighter Works Three Jobs to Support His Family: Part 1.” ABC News,
https://abcnews.go.com/2020/video/pennsylvania-firefighter-works-jobs-support-family-
2022.
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Emma,
I have some revisions for you to consider:
● Review & correct MLA (quote integrations, in text citations, title formatting, etc)
● Review and correct sentence fragments (reading your essay aloud may help with this)
● Use more precise language
○ “Wellington is describing snips of those environments a lot of people face each
day being a citizen in America.” Wellington describes the racial differences that
● Review the purpose of synthesis, and how to properly connect ideas together, and then
These are just some of the revisions you can make to enhance this essay. I suggest that you come
talk with me during Clipper Block, or after school, so we can look at some of the ways to
Grade: C-