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Cappon, R. J. (1989) - The Word - An Associated Press Guide To Good News Writing. Associated Press. (Leads)
Cappon, R. J. (1989) - The Word - An Associated Press Guide To Good News Writing. Associated Press. (Leads)
Cappon, R. J. (1989) - The Word - An Associated Press Guide To Good News Writing. Associated Press. (Leads)
The Agony of
Square One
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There is no getting around it, although every writer
sometimes wishes there were: Every story must have a
beginning. A lead. Incubating a lead is a cause o f great
agony. W hy is no mystery. Based on the lead, a reader
makes a critical decision: Shall I go on?
Don’t be intimidated by leads, however. Think o f them
as though they cost you 10 bucks per word, each word to be
engraved on stainless steel while you’re sitting on a hot
stove. Think economy.
A good lead makes a clear statement o f the essential
news point and when possible includes a detail that distin-
guishes the story from others of its kind. If the bank rob-
bers escaped in a baby blue Mercedes, that small fact be-
longs in the lead.
The lead should have maximum effect with minimum o f
phrase. It must not mumble. Mumblers come from a vari-
ety of causes:
• A gaggle of secondary detail
• Abstract and general language
• Vagueness
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THE WORD
That little gem draws the reader right into the story.
Here’s another, which tells virtually the whole story in two
short sentences:
M IAM I (AP) — Bill Cashman, a fireman, says he didn’t mind pos-
ing nude for a centerfold in a magazine for women who like men. But
he has a $2 million objection to use o f the picture by a magazine for
men who like men.
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— ^ T.R A DS
M ARIETTA, Ohio (AP) — His work done, his children grown, his
age past 80, his days o f toil to get ahead well behind, George Oakes
nonetheless sat down one day and built a better mousetrap.
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Beware Overloads
A common cause o f cardiac arrest in leads is overloading
— too many ideas, too much inconsequential detail.
Do the mechanics matter in this lead?
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LEADS
SAN FRANCISCO — Rank and file members of two Bay Area
Rapid Transit unions voted Thursday night to authorize a strike call
by an ad-hoc committee of labor groups negotiating with the transit
agency.
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THE WORD
Another example:
With consumers continuing their stay away from showrooms and
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LEADS
So is that lead.
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Control Yourself
If you hold to the rule that good leads rarely exceed 25 to
30 words, you won’t go wrong. W ith some writers, the tend-
ency is to overstuff leads in proportion to the importance o f
the story. Big story, big lead. The opposite treatment is
usually the correct one. Good writers are aware o f the vir-
tue of restraint. A lead by the A P’s John Barbour:
Man landed on the moon, this day, Sunday, July 20,1969.
A Matter o f Tension
A good lead is like a fiddle string, the product o f the right
tension. One detail too few or too many and the note will be
off. An overstuffed lead pants and hisses, an underdone
lead whispers, and there’s a fine line between the two.
This one is clearly overstuffed:
PHILADELPHIA — Federal attorneys who say they fear the de-
struction of records related to their civil suit alleging Philadelphia of-
ficials condone police abuse “may be afflicted with paranoia,” City
Solicitor Sheldon Albert said Monday.
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LEADS
The fact that he was executed makes his room for legal
maneuver zero, not almost gone. Why drag it in? Better:
STARKE, Fla. — John Spenkelink went to his death in the elec-
tric chair today after visits from his family and his minister.
Pitfalls o f Attribution
A common pitfall for the lead writer comes with attribu-
tion. Cattle may chew cud contentedly, but readers should-
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Having quoted the pilots in the first graf, the writer can’t
solve the problem of attribution without repeating every-
thing. The solution, though, is easy:
When Howard Hughes was put aboard an air ambulance for the
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LEADS
A vintage double-decker:
Half of the Philadelphia Art Museum’s permanent galleries were
closed Sunday because of a shortage of security guards.
Museum officials said they had to close part o f the museum be-
cause the city had not provided money for about 100 additional
guards.
Second-Cycle Woes
Overstuffing, double-decking and other fatal diseases are
often encountered when the writer is struggling with that
old nemesis, the second-cycle lead. Every reporter will
eventually confront a second-cycle lead; for Associated
Press reporters it is a part o f the daily routine. Since
phrases like “ day before yesterday” are not in the vocabu-
lary of leads, the problem arises in trying to make old news
appear fresh. With no new development to come to the res-
cue, writers are left to their own resources.
This writer, reporting the day-old news that McGovern
had fired his executive assistant, was up to the challenge:
WASHINGTON — Sen. George McGovern remembers what it’s
like to fight an uphill battle in the Democratic presidential primaries
and then find party leaders still struggling to deny him the nomina-
tion.
McGovern resented it when it happened to him in 1972. And he
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Legalistic Leads
In covering police and court stories, there is sometimes
legitimate use in the lead for otherwise cumbersome or
legalistic words and phrases. One o f these is in connection
with in stories about people who are questioned or arrested
or sought for a crime with which they haven’t been
charged. But there’s absolutely no warrant for using it after
a man has been charged (say what he was charged with) or
after he’s been sentenced or pronounced guilty. Some re-
porters are so afflicted with the legal shakes that you can
read:
Joseph Smith was scheduled Monday to be sentenced in connec-
tion with the Smithtown murder after a jury convicted him . . .
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