IELTS-planet writing

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport
or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught
to become a good sports person or musician.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion .

 
It is clear that many boys and girls have certain abilities in some fields such as sport and music
when they were born, and the others are not. While I accept that certain talents are available when
they were born, I strong believe that teaching is an appropriate method to create a good sports
person or musician.

If people are born with certain talents, they own passion and learn quickly skill in that field. In my
opinion, most of child is so lazy in learning. However, with passion, any child can be relentless hard
work. Besides that, having available abilities assist them learning quickly. My younger sister has a
little ability in foreign language. Indeed, she learnt everything faster than me, and she became an
influence English speaker when she was 15 years old.

On the other hand, if boys and girls are born without certain talents, teaching is an appropriate
solution to help them become a good person. Even without available talents, any child is able to
learn how to practice in right method. When I was a child, my parents force me to learn guitar
instrument although it was not my favorite. However, I tried to learn and practice relentlessly along
my teacher. As a result, I am able to perform guitar in many shows now.
 
In conclusion, there are convincing arguments both for available clever and against teaching to
become a good sports and musician, but I believe that any child can be a talent if they have
relentless work hard spirit.

Grade

Task Response 4 bài của bạn hơi ngắn nếu bỏ ra những từ giống trong đề bài. Lý luận
và ví dụchưa thuyết phục lắm khi trả lời câu hỏi.

Cohesion and 4.5-5 Bạn kết nố i cá c câ u tương đố i tố t. tuy nhiên có nhữ ng lỗ i liên kết
Coherence câ u. Câ u topic sentence chưa tố t.

Vocabulary 4-5 Bạn chưa có nhiều từ vự ng để diễn đạ t ý cua mình

Grammar 4-5 Bạn viết tố t cá c câ u đơn giả n. cá c câ u phứ c tạ p cò n có lỗ i. Có mộ t

số lỗ i dung từ

Overall 4-5 Mình dề nghị bạn đọc nhiều để học cách viết academic. Hoc cách
viết câu phức tạp. khi có những từ không chắc chắn cách dùng thì
nên tham khảo ví dụ trước khi viết. Tìm ý cho bài viết trước khi viết
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Đề nghị dàn bài

Introduction
- It is true that some people are born with some talents
- I believe that learning and practicing can help someone to advance skills.

Para 1

- Talents can not be learned

- For example, rare talented people such as Picaso, Einsten are child podigies.
- It might take a life time to be good at some skill or never reach the ideal level
- Some talents can not be taught.
- For example, creativity, art, vocal.

Para 2

- Talents can be learned

- Being at good at sport requires flexibility, endurance... which are achievable with
practising for most people.
- For example, body building, Ly Duc wasnt born with mucular body.
- Similarly, passion can replace inherit talents
- For example, you example

Mình đề nghị là bạn nên viết bài mới dựa vào dàn bài này để viết một bài mới hoàn chỉnh hơn
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