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The police officer who had been injured, ended up in the hospital.
The following public buildings were damaged by the storm, Madison School,
The Bridgetown City Hall, and the police station.
The eagle landed on it’s nest with a fish for its young.
The two squirrels bounded across the road We almost hit them with our car.
The cat slid across the table that was in the middle, of the room.
Paige began complaining about the coffee-she was always complaining about
something-so I ignored her.
Nicole explained “The problem isn’t the economy. It’s the pandemic.”
He was upset about the graffiti on the wall; which included graphic profanity.
Did Taylor just say, “I am the only person able to fix this?”
Part 1b: Grammar Challenge
Proofread the following ten sentences, using proofreading symbols to correct
them. Then, on the right, name the grammar error. In each sentence, there is one
grammar error. You will receive two points for correctly fixing the grammar error
and one point for naming the that error. Hint: There is no apostrophe error or
shifted tense error in the list below.
The COVID-19 pandemic has impacted the life 500-student enrollment reached by 1895-the college
of nearly every person in the world. Stories of and farm had only a number of shallow wells to
how Iowa State students, faculty, and staff have draw upon. As the college water supply dwindled,
worked to HELP fight the global pandemic have cases of typhoid fever developed on campus in mid-
appeared in newspapers and magazines and on October. And when the college literally drank its
television. Yet while the current outbreak isnew, wells dry several weeks later, President Beardshear
Iowa State has a long history of facing epidemics. found himself in a difficult situation. Without
These stories of sorrow and loss also show how sufficient water to flush the sewer system, the
the institution met the challenges of the time to college faced the very real threat of a major outbreak
keep the community safe. of tyfoid fever. After consulting the faculty,
Beardshear closed the college four weeks early, sent
Although Iowa Agricultural College as ISU was the students home, and canceled graduation exercises
then known) was founded in 1858, classrooms,
labs and dormitory facilities were not ready until
1869 when the first students arrived on campus.
With the inception of classes, the college faced
constant public health concerns. Erly epidemics at
the young college were brought on by
overcrowding, an inadequate water supply, and
poor sanitary conditions.
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The overcrowded conditions greatly worried Student Army Training Corps (SATC). It was not
the president, and he pushed the Board of long before the floor of the State Gym, along with
Trustees to allow students to live in the city of boarding houses and fraternities close to campus,
ame s. However, as the Trustees were conscious were requisitioned as hospital space. One of the
of the need to balance budgets, and the income women's dormitories was used to care for female
from room and board helped the bottom line, flu victims.
Classes were suspended, and the campus
was quarantined. Both students and Sate men
they turned a deaf ear to Beardshears requests.
needed special passes to go into Ames. No one
With little choice, Iowa State continued with
could leave campus except in a family
too many people in too small a space, and
emergency, and dining in town was forbidden.
conditions become favorable for public health
issues.
A global pandemic
The public health issues that had confronted
Iowa State before 1918 were specific to campus
and were a direct result of sanitary issues solved
relatively quickly by college authorities. But, as
the world became smaller and long-distance
travel more common, more people from
different parts of the country came to Iowa
State and broght with them more global public
health concerns.
During the last months of War World I in Though the student newspaper claimed that the
1918, the world faced the outbreak of what influenza had been “literally stamped out” in it's
people at the time called the “Spanish Flu” or October 25 edition, such was hardly the case.
the H1N1 vims, and Iowa State was caught up While the number of cases of flu had declined,
in a global pandemic. In the United States, the even by Armistice Day on November 11, their
disease may well have started in rural kansas. were still over 100 cases in the hospital. The
But by March 1918 it had reached military influenza proved as deadly as it was disruptive to
training facilities in Fort Riley, and from there it both college and SATC affairs. More than 50 men
spread rapidly. The flu was unusual in that its from the SATC corps died from the flu, while 28
first waves attacked young people between 20 from the student body fell victim to the disease by
and 40 years of age; thus, college campuses and the time the epidemic died down in late November
military training facilities were among the The SATC men who died are listed with the
hardest hit locations. Over 24 weeks in 1918, World War I dead in the Memorial Union's Gold
the influenza killed approximately 675,000 Star Hall.
AME RI CANS.
H1N1 influenza returned to Iowa State
The first cases at Iowa State College (as the throughout the 1920s. In January 1920 the Ames
college was known by that time) appeared on Daily Tribune took a positive attitude to the fact
October 8, and the flu swept through the that there were “probably something like 20 cases
community so quickly that within several weeks of influenza in the city—all mild.” But by January
there were 1,250 cases. The new college hospital 27, all dances had been banned, and Dr. C.G.
(now the Student Services Building) had just Tilden, ISC's physician, reported nearly 100 cases
opened that spring, and it was quickly filled to at the college hospital. The ISC Student was not
capacity with sick studen ts and men from the blind to growing problem in and around campus.
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Date: April 2, 2021
To: Revealing Reality team
From: Catie Gilhooly
Subject: “Ofcom Children’s Media Lives: Life in Lockdown”
Dear team,
Thank you for giving me the opportunity to read and edit your findings document, “Life in Lockdown.”
As a twenty-year-old not so far off from the ages of many of these subjects highlighted and an avid social
media user (especially over the past year!), I found this article to be extremely interesting. There’s a lot of
good that this information can do in helping parents and educators to better understand this age group and
their “obsessions” with technology, and the ways that this has changed with the global pandemic.
In order to fit these purposes, there are revisions that must be made mostly in terms of organization and a
shift in tone. The document currently has a very technical tone with academic language, but it would be
beneficial to have a more personal tone for our audience of parents and educators. We want to make this
information inviting and accessible to everyone by humanizing the data (after all, our subjects are
human!).
Market Analysis
Again, our primary audience are the parents and educators of the kids in this general age group. With the
state of the world with the pandemic, many parents have felt like they cannot take care of their children as
their own worlds are changing at pivotal social and growing moments of their lives. Thus, they come to
this document with the aim of understanding exactly how the kids they love, and their peers are using
social media and the Internet to adjust to and cope with these huge world changes. Educators have the
same goal—understanding where these kids are at so they can better serve and educate them.
It is expected that the primary mode of this document would be social media (ironically enough!).
Therefore, this document should also be adjusted to be better read on screen rather than print.
Additionally, it has to be engaging to the reader and hold their attention to encourage them to stick with it
despite their busy parenting and working schedules. Schools or other youth organizations may even
endorse or publish this document to offer support and insight to parents and educators. It could even
result in a change in how online learning is conducted on a local, state, or federal level, as e-learning is a
major topic in this document.
Content Analysis
This document currently has great use of a variety of sources. The inclusion of quotes and personal
recounting sprinkled into the analysis and summary of trends throughout the document serve as little bits
of that personal element mixed into the overall academic tone. Now we just want to pull those personal
parts and make them the main focus of the document. This is mostly going to be done through re-
organization and language change to make the information tell the stories of these children as they
navigate through these challenging times with the help of social media and technology.
Missing Information
The best way to keep readers engaged is through visuals and images. That being said, the document will
need all of the visuals and pictures that can possibly be used. We may consider reaching out to the
subjects and seeing if there are more pictures that they have of their everyday lives in lockdown (while
maintaining that privacy).
The current document also has an entire section dedicated to “new habits reported by teenage girls.”
While this organization is going to change and that information will be dispersed throughout the
narratives of the subjects, it’s important to even that out and talk about trends for the male subjects as
well.
Information to Omit
A huge aspect of the academic language is the “summaries of key findings” specifically. For the
introduction especially this information is irrelevant if we are taking on a more personal approach. We
also want the parental tips and quotes should be excluded from the main copy to keep focus on the kids.
Organization Analysis
Right now, the document is organized by topic. Now we want to spin that on its head to tell its own story-
the story of these kids in lockdown, how their lives changed (and are changing) and how they adapted. It
should also be a priority not to downplay or discredit the struggles of these children, in order to make the
reader empathetic and hopefully help the audience to better understand their side of this pandemic.
For the introduction specifically, the summary/preview of “key findings” should be omitted as previously
mentioned and replaced with more context of the COVID-19 pandemic, lockdown, and how suddenly it
all came on. The goal is to tell this story chronologically if possible, by highlighting the profiles of one
singular child at a time and connecting them to each other.
Design
Another sure-fire way of making this document more approachable and relevant to the social media topic
is to make it look more like social media. The document can use templates from sites like YouTube,
Twitter, Instagram, Google Maps, Snapchat, and TikTok as inspiration. These are very recognizable,
especially to younger audiences. Please see the attached thumbnails for inspiration and context in terms of
the cover, the table of contents, each “profile” page, and the conclusion. It will also be worthwhile to
include more color throughout.
The parental tips and quotes from the original document can also be placed into “Parental Advisory”
boxes on the sides of pages. This keeps the focus on the kids but also incorporates that perspective as a
secondary focus.
Revisions
Again, I thoroughly enjoyed this document and learned a lot about the current state of social media and
the glimpses that kids are seeing into the world. We already have many necessary elements, but require
re-organization and help from our designers to incorporate those social media elements. I would love to
see new, rough designs by April 16th at the latest, so that I can provide additional feedback. I anticipate
a final draft date of April 30th. If you should have any questions on my edits or comments, feel free to
contact me by email at cgilhool@purdue.edu or by phone at 219-741-5647. I look forward to revisions
and seeing the progress of this document!
Sincerely,
Catie Gilhooly
Editor, College of Liberal Arts
Style Sheet
Manuscript: “CDC Grand Rounds: Chronic Fatigue Syndrome – Advancing
Research and Clinical Education”
Date of Latest Addition or Change: Jan. 27, 2021
Copyeditor: Catie Gilhooly Proofreader: Catie Gilhooly
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Aspartate transaminase
Alanine transaminase
Alkaline phosphatase
Albumin
Antinuclear antibodies
Allostatic load
CDC
Creatinine
C-reactive protein
Comorbid conditions
Coxiella burnetti
CME
Etiologic agent
Epstein-Barr Virus
Free thyroxine
Giardia
Lactate dehydrogenase
MMWR
Medscape
MedEd Portal
Neuroendocrine response
Nonpharmacologic
Orthostatic intolerance
Persons
Postexertional malaise
Polymorphism
Pharmacologic
Pathways to Prevention
Q-fever
Rheumatoid factor
Sedimentation rate
Sjörgen’s syndrome
Stanford
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