Essay 3 Peer Review

Original Questions
 How is my structure flow does it correspond easily for you “the reader” to understand?
 Is my evidence good enough?
 Do I have any misspelling, fragments, run-ons?
 Is there any repetition in any paragraph?
 Is my introduction and conclusion straight forward and clear message for you “reader” to
comprehend?

Classmate response

 So far, all citations look great

 Both your in-text citations and works cited page are really good so far
 Your research question is a good strong question. It is understanding and interesting
 Yes, each paragraph goes with the concept of your research question which helps you
essay get your point across
 So far, I did not see any grammatical errors, though as you come to an end with your
essay keep an eye out for any repeating words everything looks great.

Dr. Nelson’s Comments

 citations for the "what is known about the topic" sentences of the introduction
 --identifiable thesis statement that gives outline of body of paper
 --body sections follow "big" structure of thesis statement
 --paragraph structure is disorganized, in some cases paragraphs are too long and need
broken up into two
 --research not made use of to best effect, some citations missing where expected and too
much quoting (reducing reliance on quotations by paraphrasing is better)