Professional Documents
Culture Documents
Chapter 4
Chapter 4
Chapter 4
Chapter 4
Constructing Clear
Sentences and
Paragraphs
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Clarity and Short Sentences
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Limit Sentence Content
DON’T
Many consumers have expressed dissatisfaction with the
relatively high prices of the new Japanese cars, but this
has not prevented large numbers of people from
purchasing these cars and pushing sales higher than
many automotive experts had forecast, thus firmly
entrenching the Japanese cars in a large segment of the
automobile market.
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Limit Sentence Content
(Break up long sentences)
DO
Many consumers have expressed dissatisfaction with the
relatively high prices of the new Japanese cars. However,
this has not prevented large numbers of people from
purchasing these cars and pushing sales higher than
many automotive experts had forecast. The Japanese
cars have thus become entrenched in a large segment of
the automobile market.
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Limit Sentence Content
DON’T
The production planning department assigns to each
production order a number that is called a job-order
number, which becomes the identifying means of
reporting to the accounting department the direct costs
relating to a production order, and which can reveal
additional information about the job through code
numbers or letters added to the job-order number.
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Limit Sentence Content
(Break up long sentences)
DO
The production planning department assigns to each
production order a number that is called a job-order
number. This number becomes the identifying means of
reporting to the accounting department the direct costs
relating to a production order. Adding code numbers or
letters to the job-order number reveals more
information about the job.
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Limit Sentence Content
DON’T
I should appreciate first obtaining clearance from your
bureau, subsequent to which I plan to send this
preliminary draft through appropriate channels to Mr.
Suarez of the Nevada agency, asking him for information
we need in order to discuss the statistics for the entire
year, and also inviting someone in the agency to
participate as joint author of the final article.
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Limit Sentence Content
(Break up long sentences)
DO
I should appreciate first obtaining clearance from your
bureau. Then I plan to send this preliminary draft
through appropriate channels to Mr. Suarez of the
Nevada agency, asking him for information we need in
order to discuss the statistics for the entire year. I plan
also to invite someone in the agency to participate as
joint author of the final article.
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Economize on Words (Eliminate Cluttering)
• Production will decrease next month due to the fact that we must
retool for the next model.
• Production will decrease next fall because we must retool for the next
model.
• Contrary to our expectations, the new law will allow the company
to reduce its income taxes.
• Unexpectedly, the new law will let the company reduce its income
taxes.
• You are hereby instructed to send all daily reports directly to this
office as promptly as possible.
• Send all reports to this office promptly.
• On the date of March 1, all reports must be ready for the purpose
of mailing them to the home office.
• All reports must be ready to mail to the home office by March 1.
• It will be observed that all reports coming from our St. Louis
headquarters are routed through the district sales managers.
• Reports from our St. Louis headquarters are routed through the
district sales managers.
• The charge of negligence has been denied by all four of the officers.
• The four officers denied the negligence charge.
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All Short Sentences
(The effect is choppy.)
The main building was inspected on October 1. Mr.
George Wills inspected the building. Mr.Wills is a
vice president of the company. He found that the
building has 6,500 square feet of floor space. He
also found that it has 2,400 square feet of storage
space. The new store must have a minimum of
6,000 square feet of floor space. It must have 2,000
square feet of storage space. Thus, the main
building exceeds the space requirements for the
new store. Therefore, Mr. Wills concluded that the
main building is adequate for the company’s needs.
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Some Subordination
(but not logical)
Mr. George Wills, who inspected the main
building on October 1, is a vice president of the
company. His inspection, which supports the
conclusion that the building is large enough for
the proposed store, uncovered these facts. The
building has 6,500 square feet of floor space and
2,400 square of feet of storage space, which is
more than the minimum requirements of 6,000
and 2,000 square feet, respectively, of floor and
storage space.
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Good Subordination
(important points emphasized)
The main building is large enough for the new
store. This conclusion, reached by Vice President
George Wills following his October 1 inspection
of the building, is based on these facts: The
building’s 6,500 square feet of floor space
exceeded the minimum requirements by 500
square feet. The 2,400 square feet of storage
spaced exceeded the minimum requirement by
400 square feet.
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Give the Sentences Unity
Relate ideas logically:
• Both hotels can guarantee the 250 rooms we will require. The
Marriott is new (since 2002), and its rooms are modern and,
therefore, more appealing. The 69-year old Westgate,
however, is well preserved and comfortable.
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Give the Sentences Unity
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Word Sentences Logically
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Lack of Unity in a Paragraph
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Contrasting Pages: Long Paragraphing versus Short
Paragraphing
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Make Good Use of Topic Sentences
In constructing a chart line, you should plot the item to be illustrated
as a continuous line on a grid. On the grid, you should plot time on
the horizontal axis (X-axis) and the value of the series on the vertical
axis (Y-axis). You must create the scale values and time periods for
the axis lines.
You may also compare two or more series on the same line chart. In
such a comparison, you should clearly distinguish the lines by color
or form (dots, dashes, dots and dashes, and the like). You should
clearly label them by a legend somewhere in the chart. But the
number of series that you may compare on one chart is limited. As a
practical rule, four or five series should be a maximum.
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Include only necessary information
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Include only necessary information
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“Writing and thinking are inseparable.
Not only does thinking help us to write,
writing helps us to think.”
--Richard Lederer
The Write Way
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Make Paragraphs Coherent
Show coherence through repetition of key words:
• Before buying plants you should know which varieties are
adapted to your area. Adapted varieties usually are sold by
local nurseries.
• Preferably you should state the problem in writing. Stating the
problem this way is good for many reasons.
• The order of your findings depends much on the plan you
followed in your research. This research plan probably was the
product of the preliminary analysis you made of your problem.
• Verbs contain the action in the sentence. As the action words,
they give your writing energy and impact.
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Make Paragraphs Coherent
Show coherence through the use of pronouns:
• Transitional sentences are essential to good writing. They
are the mortar that holds bricks of thought together.
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Make Paragraphs Coherent
Show coherence through the use of transition words:
• The promotion failed for two reasons. First, we had very
little preparation time. Second, we were extremely short
of experienced salespeople.
• For three years we had no funds for maintaining the
equipment. As a result, we have suffered a succession of
breakdowns.
• After the incident, we installed two additional video
cameras. Nevertheless, theft losses continued to increase.
• They built the building on the site that had been filled.
Consequently, the foundation cracked.
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