Sample paragraph (with errors)

Have you have ever received any advice from a concerning doctor or friend who is worried
about your diet? Lack of healthy snack options is actually an ongoing concerned for many
people. So we are happy to tell you that if you are someone who is concerns about a lack of
healthy food options then Seaweed-Delish is definitely best snack for you! This seaweed snack
is full of taste but low in calories so you can eat it without worrying about the affect on your
diet or health.
Edited paragraph
1. Have you ever received any advice from a concerned doctor or friend who is worried about
your diet?
2. Lack of healthy snack options is actually an ongoing concern for many people.
3. So we are happy to tell you that if you are someone who is concerned about a lack of
healthy food options then Seaweed-Delish is definitely a best snack for you!
4. This seaweed snack is full of taste by low in calories so you can eat it without concern about
the effect on your diet or health.
Explanations for edits
Correction for Sentence 1:
‘concerning’ is changed to the adjective ‘concerned’. This is an example of Pattern 3 – a
‘concerned’ someone doing something
Correction for Sentence 2:
‘concerned’ is changed to the noun ‘concern’. This is an example of Pattern 5 – something is a
matter of great or ongoing ‘concern’
Corrections for Sentence 3:
‘concerns’ is changed to the adjective ‘concerned’. This is an example of Pattern 2 – someone is
‘concerned’ about (or by) something
The missing definite article ‘the’ is added before ‘best snack’. The definite article is required
here to specify ‘best snack’.
Correction for Sentence 4:
The verb ‘affect’ changed to the noun ‘effect’.