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Break Dance Not Bones Revised - Lucas Joseph 1
Break Dance Not Bones Revised - Lucas Joseph 1
Break Dance Not Bones Revised - Lucas Joseph 1
Professor Riordan
WRIT 2
23 April 2023
PERM: 4395034
The premise of writing lyrics to a rap song about breakdancing was a perfect way
project. I was lucky enough to find an article titled “Breakdance Injuries and Overuse
Journal of Sports Medicine with the purpose of filling in a gap of medical knowledge
regarding those injuries in breakdancers. The article had a clear intended audience of
academics in the field of orthopedics, so targeting an audience of old school rap fans
and breakers made the writing process very engaging. It took me a while to find the
idea, but I was sure I could create a compelling piece through my love for hip-hop
culture, skills in creative writing, and interestingly, a number of constraints. The idea of
making some sort of rap song felt very natural for mainly two reasons: First, because I
like to think I’m better than the average person at writing rhymes, and second, I figured
that the obvious overlaps between these two pillars of hip-hop would allow me to clearly
signal genre to my readers through personal knowledge and language used. Along with
this project, as if I had a unique opportunity to share this passion with others.
and handing out surveys to competitors to answer questions about their injuries,
mimicking an introduction and methods section in an academic article. The verse then
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reflects the results and discussion sections and makes references to their findings. The
original article did have some charts which gave in depth breakdowns of injuries by
different variables, but I stuck to only referencing what I saw as the key takeaways in
the article for brevity. One piece of feedback suggested that I include more numbers
and data from the research, and so I made an effort to creatively weave in the paper’s
Though this kind of writing is naturally incredibly different from most of the
academic writing I’ve done in school, it was surprising to look at writing rap verses
through the lens of content that we covered so far in this course. For example, in Mike
Bunn’s “How to Read Like A Writer”, the author asks students to carefully consider why
certain choices were made by an author to better understand the writing process(Bunn
72). With each line that I wrote, there were infinite different paths that I as the author
could have taken and it was up to me to choose the most appropriate one. Similar to
how the article mentions an author having to consider factors like convention of the
genre and choosing to reveal or hide details from the audience, I would have to balance
including important points from my original article to convey the same information while
maintaining a musical and rhythmic structure. The choice of using “per dancer” or “on
average” versus terms like “mean” or “capita” to describe frequency of injury in dancers
was carefully made to rhyme and have only a certain number of syllables, all while not
describes as the collection of words used within different groups and social settings.
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Boyd writes that one of the main purposes of jargon is to allow for precise
communication among a group(Boyd 89). As I translated the original article into rap,
words like “impingement syndrome” and “chronic skin lumps”, were replaced by rhymes
describing “gold medals all paid by joints that dislocate and heads that get scratched up,
scuffed and bruised”. While the former words have clear meanings within the original
text that allow medical practitioners to clearly understand each other, the genre of rap is
at its best when these words are replaced and rhythmically creative solutions are found
in their place. Similarly, “mane”, “BOTY”, and “b-girls” are all words that have clear
meanings in the world of breaking, that I would have to take the care of explaining in the
Though I did have a good amount of fun in bringing this project to light, there
were also some challenges that I had to overcome, ranging from word choice, to the
entire structure of my piece. Originally, I pictured that I would only have time to write my
rap verses, as recording and editing a song requires a good amount of technical
know-how. This led to the problem of having rhythmically complex lyrics lose their
combinations of four-bar verses. The best hip-hop that I’ve heard stays far away from
simple A-B-A-B rhyme schemes and often uses careful pauses to trick the listeners and
then blow their minds. If I wanted to make my lyrics more complicated, readers would
not be able to understand my intentions simply through reading my lyrics. During the
final revision stage of this project, I was able to record a version of my song to the beat
from Nas’s “Represent” as a way to complete the project. Recording provided its own
unique challenges, as I would have to inflect my speech to fit within the confines of a
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steady beat. Despite the difficulty, the project feels much more complete thanks to the
recording and my worries about the audience not feeling the impact of my lyrics was
would require some dumbing down of information from the original academic article.
With these constraints in mind, I was led to the idea of creating a mock Genius.com
page. In addition to hosting lyrics to all kinds of songs from popular to indie, Genius.com
allows users to comment and annotate lyrics with their interpretations of the songs.
These annotations have been reviewed by users and will include sources to make sure
the interpretation of the song most likely to be correct is featured. I figured that if I were
to make my final draft in the style of one of these pages, I could use the annotations to
clear up some of the concepts I was forced to cut short in the lyrics. I could also use
them to give meanings of breakdance terms. This would address one of the most
common pieces of feedback I received in class where my peers didn’t know what some
of the hip-hop and breaking related language meant. I also figured it would add a bit
more of a creative flair to the writing if I mimicked the site's layout instead of just having
I did receive some feedback as well from Eugene regarding the structure of the
song. It was brought to my attention that I could have segmented my piece into verses,
choruses, and bridges. While I understand the value of adding that sort of structure,
many of the songs in the rap genre that I like instead use sixteen line verses. I used a
single verse of roughly double that size just because it felt natural as I was writing my
lyrics.
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Overall, this project was a good exercise in writing that gave me a better
perspective on decision-making and genre. Just like developing your personal style in
dance, you first need to learn and understand the conventions of the artistic medium,
and then with that knowledge choose a direction or even bend the rules to create
something powerful.
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Works Cited
Bunn, Mike. “How to Read Like a Writer.” Writing Spaces: Readings on Writing, Volume
Kauther, Max Daniel. “Breakdance Injuries and Overuse Syndromes in Amateurs and
Professionals.” The American Journal of Sports Medicine, vol. 37, no. 4, 2009,
pp. 797-802.