Brick Manufacturing

The given diagram illustrates the process of brick manufacturing. (phải tách đoạn ở đây chứ, I-O
không nên nhập thành một đoạn nhé)The brick (brick manufacturing – brick không phải tên của
process) is a manmade linear process that starts with the collection of clay and ends with bricks being
delivered. Overall, there are seven main steps in this process.

At the first step of the process, clay is collected with the use of the digger. Some unnecessary
substances are got rid of(vẫn khá rõ ràng, nhưng không phải word choice tốt nhất – filtered) by
staying on a metal grid (cái gì stay on the metal grid – câu confusing), and purified clay subsequently
drops on the roller. The addition of sand and water makes clays(không đếm được) turn into a mixture ,
which is then shaped by a mould or a wire cutter. Câu cuối viết okay

At the fourth step, after a proper amount number of bricks is made, they are directly moved
transported (directly không phù hợp nghĩa trong câu) into a drying oven and dried in the next 24 to 48
hours. Bricks then examined?? Bricks biết kiểm tra> a temperature changing process, starting with
moderating at 200 degree to 980 degree; continuing with high temperatures at 870 degree to 1300
degree; finally(finally làm trạng ngữ phải có dấu , - ‘;’ chỉ được dùng để tách câu compound – cấu
trúc lúc này là S+V;S1+V1; nếu cô dùng ; tách 3 mệnh đề thì là sai ngữ pháp) staying in a cooling
chamber for 48 to 72 hours waiting for the degree temperature of the bricks of heat drops. The final
bricks are packaged and delivered in the last step. Viết khá ổn, có thể thấy mong muốn thay đổi khỏi
template, tuy vậy vẫn có phần không hiệu quả khi không làm chủ được ngữ pháp và từ vựng.

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Units of electricity by fuel source in Australia & France

The given pie charts depict từ này chỉ dùng trong bài hình thôi the amount of electricity produced by
different fuel sources produced in Australia and France in two different years.

Overall, Australia and France met the same total production amount of 270 units for both years no no,
mặc dù khá tình cờ là đúng, nhưng không ai viết trend chung lại đi cộng tổng giá trị 2 năm cả, lúc này
cô nên nhìn vào trend cùng tăng hay hơn là tổng bằng nhau. In 2000, there was were a significant
increase in the total production and fuel sources using in both countries.

In 1980, a half of electricity was produced by coal in Australia while the other types of fuel sources
such as Natural Gas accounted for twenty percent as much as Hydro Power, and Oil was used to
produce only 10 percent of the total production kinh, câu compound – complex chính xác, hy vọng
đây không phải là sự tình cờ. However, there was dynamic changes khái niệm dynamic changes
không rõ ràng – trong task 1 thì everything should be detaield in the fuel sources using’s' shares in
this country in 2000.

The percentage of coal, that was used to produce 170 units, was roughly more than three fourths of
the total units and was nearly tripled as much as those in 1980. Sao lại có câu tách đoạn riêng thế này?
Template nên là 2 đoạn thân thôi.

In France, five different fuel sources was used quite equally in 1980. Hydro Power took a tiny
modest/negligible hơn là tiny percentage at five percent in this year. In 2000, France’s electricity
production relied mostly on Nuclear Power, which made up almost 75 percent of the total 180 units of
electricity.

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