THINGH, Sangay (Sancho)

N11674059
EARP, Class 13 Jan & Stacey

Part A

Describe two negative effects of living in a fast-paced, modern society.

The living standards of modern society affect the life of people. According to Svensson, 2015

he stated that, modern expectations of working late or arriving late and trying to impress

their boss leads to sleep deprivation which indeed can affect mental health, poor

performances, or grade. For example, sleep deprivation in medical profession can make

mistakes in their surgeries due to fatigue. On the other hand, working late hours and

economic pressure of rising medical and accommodation cost can lead to stress. The study

reveals that 43 percentage of Americans dies prematurely due to stress. This stress can

affect the mental health of a person, as it can cause heart disease, that is chronic stress

related to cardiovascular disease (Cavanagh, 2017). Therefore, the psychological fear or

worry of future, fear of losing job and fear of not being able to support family can cause

acute stress which can affect the mental health (Ogawa, 2016). Thus, in this modern world,

due to changes it can affect the livelihood of people.

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N11674059
EARP, Class 13 Jan & Stacey
Part B

What should people do to reduce the negative effects of living in a fast-paced, modern
society?

The change in modern society can cause many negative effects, to overcome that there are

many ways. Firstly, stressing is common in our day-to-day life due our work loads and

financials pressure. The research investigated to see if a person knowing about their stress

can make them healthier. The scientific evidence that the body response changes as a

person change their mind about stress (Svensson, 2015). In addition to that to overcome

stress an individual must find a solution like a leisure time, exercising, doing what you like to

cope up the stress. Moreover, eating healthy diet and sleeping on time can enhance the

mental health of a person to be more productive and efficient. Counselling is another

method of releasing stress; more people believe that taking counselling can get a different

aspect of looking into their life. Finally, spending time with family can relieve the stress and

mend the person. In conclusion, taking counselling, looking after the diet, and spending time

with family can enhance the living style of people.

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EAP 2 W10 IST Crite ria High Distinction
7 (above 85%)
Task Achievement (15%) • All requirements of the task
appropriately met (genre, word
count)
Integration of sources • Full and accurate
(25%) understanding of all source
materials (R and L)
• Fully appropriate and
accurate selection of relevant
information from all sources
• Excellent ability to identify
connections and common themes
across source material
• Effective and skilful synthesis
and integration of sources using
relevant paraphrasing,
summarising and direct
quotation/s
Communicative Effect and • Holds the target reader's
Cohesion (15%) attention effectively
throughout
• The response is very well
organised. It is logical, and has a
clear and precise central topic.
Development of supporting ideas
is very good
• Effectively uses a wide range of
simple and complex cohesive
devices
Grammar (15%) • Uses a wide range of both
simple and complex grammatical
forms with full control,
flexibility, and some precision
• Errors, if present, are related
to complex structures but the
vast majority of sentences are
accurate
Vocabulary (15%) • Uses a wide range of
appropriate vocabulary,
including less common vocabulary,
flexibly and with some
precision
• Errors, if present, are related to
less common vocabulary
Comprehension Qs (15%) scores 10 or more
Distinction
6 (84% - 75)
• Most requirements of the task
appropriately met (genre, word
count)
• Accurate understanding of
most source materials (R and L)
• Appropriate and accurate
selection of relevant information
from all sources
• Good ability to identify
connections and common themes
across source material
• Effective synthesis and
integration of sources using
relevant paraphrasing,
summarising and direct
quotation/s
• Holds the target reader's
attention throughout
• The response is well organised -
It is logical, and has a clear central
topic. Development of supporting
ideas is very good.
• Effectively uses a good range
of simple and complex cohesive
devices
• Uses a wide range of both
simple and complex grammatical
forms with firm control and
some flexibility
• Errors are mostly related to
complex structures but most
sentences are accurate
• Uses a wide range of
appropriate vocabulary,
including some less common
vocabulary, with flexibility
• Errors tend to occur with less
common vocabulary
scores 8 or 9
Cre dit
5 (74% - 65%)
• May be problems with
requirements of the task (genre,
word count)
• Mostly accurate understanding
of most source materials (R and L)
• Mostly appropriate selection
of relevant information from most
sources
• Adequate ability to identify
connections and common themes
across source material
• Good synthesis and integration
of sources using relevant
paraphrasing, summarising and
direct quotation/s
• Holds the target reader's
attention throughout
• The response is well organised - lapses
It is logical, and has a clear central • The response is mostly well
topic. Development of supporting organised - It is mostly logical,
ideas is good
•  Generally uses a good range of Development of supporting ideas
simple and complex cohesive
devices
• Uses a wide range of both
simple and complex grammatical
forms with a good degree of
control
• Errors are limited with many
sentences accurate
• Uses a wide range of
appropriate vocabulary,
including some less common
vocabulary, with some flexibility
• Errors related to both common
and less common vocabulary
are minor
scores 6 or 7
Pass
4 (64% - 50%)
• May be problems with a
number of requirements of the
task (genre, word count)
• Some accurate understanding of
some source materials (R and L)
• Some appropriate selection of
relevant information from some
sources
• Some ability to identify
connections and common themes
across source material
• Adequate synthesis and
integration of sources using
relevant paraphrasing,
summarising and direct
quotation/s
• Holds the target reader's
attention despite occasional
and has a central topic.
is adequate
• Uses an adequate range of
simple and complex cohesive
devices
• Uses a good range of both
simple and complex grammatical
forms with a good degree of
control
• Although errors are present,
some sentences are accurate
• Uses a good range of
appropriate vocabulary,
including attempts at less
common vocabulary, but with
limited flexibility
• Errors are present and tend to
occur with more common
vocabulary
scores 5
Marginal Fail
3 (49% - 40%)
• Some requirements of the task
not met (genre, word count)
• Limited understanding of most
source materials (R and L)
• Limited selection of relevant
information from some sources
• Limited ability to identify
connections and common themes
across source material
• Some synthesis and integration
of sources but paraphrasing,
summarising and direct
quotation/s may be irrelevant/
inappropriate
• Holds the target reader's
attention only some of the time
• The response is adequately
organised but may not be logical
and / or the central topic may not
be clear. There may be some
problems with development of
supporting ideas.
• Uses a range of cohesive devices
but these may be faulty,
inappropriate, or overused
• Uses a range of simple
grammatical forms with a good
degree of control but only
some complex grammatical
forms
• Errors do not affect
comprehension but are frequent
in complex structures
• Uses a range of appropriate
vocabulary, but only attempts
less common vocabulary with
limited success
• Errors are noticeable
scores 4
THINGH, Sangay (Sancho)
EARP, Class 13 Jan & Stacey
Fail
2 (39% - 25%)
• Most requirements of the task
not met (genre, word count)
• Limited and inaccurate
understanding of most source
materials (R and L)
• Irrelevant selection of
information from sources
• Very limited ability to identify
connections and common themes
across source material
• Limited/ irrelevant synthesis
and integration of sources
• May have difficulty
communicating ideas, but the
reader can still extract meaning
with minimal effort
• There is some evidence of
organisation and only some
connection between ideas in the
response
• Uses basic and/or a limited
number of cohesive devices
• Uses a range of simple
grammatical forms with a good
degree of control but only a
limited number of complex
grammatical forms
• Errors are present in complex
structures and have a minor
effect on comprehension
• The range of vocabulary is only
adequate
• Errors are noticeable and have
a minor effect on
comprehension
scores 3
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Low Fail
1 (24% or be low)
• Requirements of the task not
met (genre, word count)
• No evidence of understanding
of source materials (R and L)
• No selection of information from
sources
• No connections made across
source material
• No synthesis or integration of
sources
• Has difficulty communicating
ideas and the text requires
considerable effort from the
reader to extract meaning
• There is limited organisation
and / or connection between ideas
in the response
• Uses basic, high frequency
linking words only
• Uses simple grammatical forms
with a degree of control but
only occasionally attempts
complex grammatical forms
• Errors can cause
comprehension problems for
the reader
• The range of vocabulary is
limited
• Errors can cause
comprehension problems for the
reader
scores 2 or below