The Development of Public Facilities.

This essay will be discussing about how and where financial

resources should be directed by local authorities and it emphasis
on the paramount importance of improving such places.
Firstly, it was expressed that sports centers will result in
healthier populations, indeed it may but it should be considered
that doing such improvement it’s generally a very expensive
financial inversion that include taxes to all the citizen and those
not interested in practicing sports, even though considering this
minor burden it is still a great idea doing so, mainly because the
percentage of this type of public will be the less, sport centers
are a fabulous candidate to receive money in order to improve
it’s equipment such as pull-ups bars, soccer or basketball fields,
barbells and dumbbells.
Just as important, it was commented that green spaces and
parks will improve the town, if those places could be
implemented it certainly would result in zones where the
population may have more space and comfort. It could be an
advantage not to separately invest in those facilities but to do so
in a park that offers people the opportunity not only the
enjoyment of stunning sights to nature but also the possibility of
working out and practicing sports there such as the previously
mentioned ones, the reason why is because it would be a more
complete building that satisfies better peoples needs.

In conclusion, parks ought receive resources from authorities to

improve it’s facilities including not only spaces for people but
also sport equipment in general.
 5 COMMON
MISTAKES
WHILE WRITING
AN ESSAY FOR
C1
1- THE CANDIDATE DOESN’T RELATE
PROMPTS TO THE QUESTION
YOU DON’T SIMPLY NEED TO DISCUSS
ABOUT TWO PROMPTS. YOU NEED TO
COMPARE AND CONTRAST.

C 1 ADVANCED ESSAY EXAMPLE:

 STUDENTS OFTEN REMEMBER TO DISCUSS
THE PROMPTS BUT FORGET TO COMPARE
AND CONTRAST THEM. MANY STUDENTS
ALSO FORGET TO ARGUE WHICH PROMPT
IS MORE IMPORTANT IN THEIR
CONCLUSION.

THE WHOLE POINT OF A C1 ESSAY IS TO COMPARE AND CONTRAST 2

PROMPTS AND DECIDE WHICH ONE IS MOST IMPORTANT IN RELATION TO
THE QUESTION.

2- THE ESSAY IS NOT A “COHERENT WHOLE”

AN ESSAY IS 1 TEXT, EVERY PART NEEDS TO
BE CONNECTED TO EVERY OTHER PART.
THEY NEED TO BE A LOGICAL FLOW, A
LOGICAL CONNECTION.

IF I TAKE YOUR ESSAY AND PUT THE

PARAGRAPHS IN A DIFFERENT ORDER
SOME SHOULD BE ABLE TO READ THIS
PARAGRAPHS AN REARENGE THEM TO PUT
THEM IN THE CORRECT ORDER BC IT
SHOULD BE OBVIOUS.
IF YOU DISCUSS THE PROMPTS
SEPARATELY IT WILL BE 2 ESSAYS IN 1
ESSAY.

ESSAY STRUCTURE:
INTRODUCTION: Introduce the topic and
state the aim of the text. This should
include chosen prompts.
PROMPT 1: Relate prompt to the topic and
question.
PROMPT 2: Relate prompt to the topic and
question.
COMPARE AND CONTRAST PROMPTS
CONCLUSION: Summarise the essay and
present your opinion.
 (Your opinion should be related to the
statements you did)

3-THE CANDIDATE DOESN’T PLAN BEFORE

WRITING
YOU NEED TO PLAN. YOU SHOULD
CONNECT ALL YOUR ESSAY PARAGRAPHS
PROPERLY.
BEFORE YOU START WRITING YOUR ESSAY
MAKE SURE YOU UNDERSTAND THE
FOLLOWING:
1-WHAT’S THE TOPIC?
2-WHAT PROMPTS WILL YOU CHOOSE?
3- WHAT’S THE QUESTION?
4- HOW CAN WE CONNECT OUR
PROMPTS TO TOPIC AND QUESTION?
5-HOW CAN WE CONNECT OUR
PROMPTS TO FORM A COHERENT
WHOLE?

4-TO SCORE A 5: WE NEED TO

COMMUNICATE COMPLEX IDEAS IN A
EFFECTIVE WAY
THIS MEANS WE SHOULD USE: MODAL VERBS,
CONDITIONALS, SUBJUNCTIVE, ETC…
WE SHOULD NOT USE OUR PERSONAL
EXPERIENCE. INSTEAD:
COMPLEX IDEAS:
SHOULD MUSEUMS RECEIVE PUBLIC
FUNDING?
What would the repercussions be for society if
museums did not receive public funding?

Why it would not matter if money that

currently goes towards museums went
towards public gardens.

IN THIS EXAMPLES WE ARE TALKING ABOUT

WIDER SOCIETAL ISSUES AND NOT OUR
PERSONAL ISSUES.
AND THIS IS EXACTLY WHAT WE HAVE TO DO.
ANSWERING THE QUESTION AS IT WAS
RELATED TO SOCIETY AND NOT DIRECTED TO
OURSELVES.
5-THE CANDIDATE INCLUDES IRRELEVANT
INFORMATION:
220-260 WORDS  C1 ADVANCED ESSAY
IT’S NOT SHORT ESPECIALLY WHEN YOU
NEED TO INCLUDE 2 PROMPTS.
NOT GOING OUT OFF TOPIC.

IF HERE AS AN EX. WE INCLUDE 3

PROMPTS WE’LL LOSE MARKS FOR
CONTENT, OR IF WE GO OUT OF TOPIC.

IF WE NOT RELATE THE 2 PROMPTS

TOGHETER WE ALSO WILL LOSE MARKS.
REMEMBER: ALL ON YOUR ESSAY
SHOULD HAVE A POINT
WHEN INCLUDING A PIECE OF
INFORMATION ASK THIS QUESTIONS
YOURSELF
 “WHY DOES THE READER NEED
TO KNOW THIS
INFORMATION?”

“HOW DOES THIS SENTENCE

HELP ME ANSWER THE
QUESTION?”

IF YOU CANT ANSWER THOSE QUESTIONS

IN YOUR HEAD DO NOT INCLUDE THAT
INFORMATION- MAKE SURE THAT ALL
WHAT YOU WRITE IS RELATED TO THE
ESSAY.