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2nd Workshop Poems
2nd Workshop Poems
Good ending – more implying than telling, suggesting than stating. The stanzas flow well, but
there could be stronger imagery and metaphors to give more depth and complexity to the story of
the relationship. Overall there is too much telling, stating, rather than implying and suggesting
through imagery, rhythm, voice and tone.
The rhymes are well-wrought and the rhythm is good. But there is too much telling, and the
cliches are there too, which makes the poem read like a familiar love poem about heartbreak. It
needs a strong metaphor, more resonant imagery to give it more depth and fresh perspective.