It is necessary for students to have

part-time jobs. Do you agree?

Group members: Elicia Lee(4) How Ker Qi(7) Ng Huey Sze(10)
Tai Xin Rou(18) Lim Seng Yang(32)
1st paragraph [Introduction]
General statement:
It is irrefutable that part-time jobs bring benefits to students.
For instance, they can earn money themselves and decrease
their parents’ burden.
Elaboration:
Besides, working part-time enables students to be familiar with
society.
Thesis statement:
Hence, in my opinion, I partially agree that students should
have a part-time job; it is because working will affect their
studies but can earn money and get working experiences.
2nd paragraph
Topic sentence:
First and foremost, students having part time jobs can help earn money to lighten
family burden.

Elaboration:
Family has various expenses and needs to spend a lot of money.

Explanation:
Students working part-time can help to share various expenses.

Example：
For example, students can earn money to pay their school fees, even utility bills and
daily expenses can be lightened by having part time jobs.
3rd paragraph
Topic Sentence:
Besides, students can get work experience once they have a part time job.

Elaboration:
Students can learn various techniques that are not available in the textbook.

Explanation:
When students find jobs, they must learn how to survive in that small society, so they must learn the
techniques such as communication skills and working skills to prevent them from getting fired.

Example:
Students will have knowledge about communication and techniques, they can find jobs easily
because they have experience in working and they know how to solve problems about relationships
between workers and employees or workmates while working in a big company. They also have
different ideas about how to finish a project as they are well-known about the market.
4th paragraph
Topic sentence:
Part time jobs bring advantages to students but also some disadvantages.

Elaboration:
Part time jobs will affect their studies.

Explanation:
This is because part time jobs will hold-up their time and they do not have enough
time to study.

Example:
To illustrate this, after doing part time jobs students will feel tired and have no
energy to study. Moreover, when students have heavy work, they have no time to
finish them and are unable to keep pace with learning.
5th paragraph [Conclusion]
General statement:
In conclusion, if one wants to have a part time job, they should have
good self discipline to manage their time effectively, meet
expectations and develop strong work habits.
Elaboration:
It can also lead to personal growth and development, which can have
a positive impact on various aspects of their lives.
Thesis statement:
Therefore, individuals who possess self-discipline are more likely to
succeed in their part-time jobs and beyond.