Section II: Editing

1. C (Incorrect verb form)

2. A (Fragment)
3. B (Incorrect verb form)
4. C (Subject Verb Agreement)
5. D (Run- on)
6. D (Run- on)
7. A (Subject Verb Agreement)
8. B (Shift in Tense)
9. C (Fragment)
10. D(Shift in Point of View)

PARAGARPH ORGANIZATION: Read the following paragraph and answer the questions below.

1 . My Best Friend: Akbar

(1) When I was in high school, I met a friend named Akbar,

who had some very admirable qualities. (2) First thing, he
looked very confident in his own unique style of clothing. (3) He
always wore a rough textured corduroy red jacket with a brown
elbow patch and olive-green faded jeans. (4) He proudly sported
a dark blue leather bracelet with a metal top around his right
hand. (5) Moreover, he used to present himself so nicely in any
occasions that people would forget his peculiar dressing style.
(6) In addition, he was a very fluent speaker and could give
speeches on any topic effortlessly. (7) Before every speech, he
tapped his finger on the microphone and began with a confident
smile. (8) His Dad was not that fluent as he was very shy. (9)
Besides, my friend was a very hardworking person. (10) He used
to study at school during day time and worked at a fast food
restaurant at night. (11) He worked so hard that sometimes he
did not have time to change his clothes before coming to the
college (12) As a result, at times, one could sniff French fries
from his clothes. (13) Lastly and most importantly, his soothing
words had a calming effect on me whenever I talked to him. (14)
His relatives were friendly like him. (15) Every time I faced a
problem, he reminded me to calm down and compose myself.
(16) He also taught me to manage the problems in my life, and
he always told me to think positively because it could help me
overcome any troubles in my life and could make me strong.
(17) CS: In conclusion, Akbar was so nice person, and I will
never forget him.

1. Write a title for the paragraph.

2. Write down the topic sentence and circle the controlling
idea.
3. Write down the numbers of 2 irrelevant sentence numbers. 8,
14
4. Write a concluding
sentence.
5. Identify the sequencing method of the paragraph. (Spatial Order/Time order/
Order of Importance/ Order of
Generality)

6. Identify and label all the sensory details in the underlined words in the
following lines. (sight, sound, taste, touch and
smell)

a. He always wore a rough textured( touch) corduroy red jacket (sight) with a
brown elbow patch and olive green faded jeans.( sight)
b. He proudly sported a dark blue leather bracelet with a metal top
(sight) around his right hand.
c. Before every speech, he tapped his finger on the microphone(sound) and
began with a confident smile.
d. As a result, at times, one could sniff French fries(smell) from his clothes