At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large

number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.

Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own
knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

Nowadays some developing countries such as Vietnam and India have more
youngsters than older(ADJ). The essay will discuss whether those countries have
more benefits than drawbacks. I disagree with this view (WHAT VIEW?) because I be-
lieve that younger people and older people have their advantages. SO NOTHING?
NO IDEA? ACCORDING TO THE ESSAY I SENT YOU WE SHOULD HAVE TWO CLEAR
DISADVANTAGES AND 2 CLEAR ADVANTAGES IN THE FIRST PARAGRAPH.

On the one hand, young adults have productive and effective (2 ADJ, NO
NOUN, PRODUCTIVE AND EFFECTIVE WHAT?) during -manual work as they may be
full of energy and more healthy physical condition compare with -old people. 37
WORDS Some service industries tend to employ teenagers as staff because those
labor works require quick service and instant reply to their customers and do not
need much experience. HOW IS THIS RELATED TO HEALTH OR ENERGY? EXPERI-
ENCE? QUICK SERVICE? ALSO, YOU ONLY DEVELOP THE IDEA WITH ONE SENTENCE?
For example, some labor work such as hotel waiters are suitable for young people
since they can stand for a whole day without tired and remove heavy stuff for a long
time.

HELEN, WE DEFINITELY STUDIED AN A&D ESSAY BEFORE.

1) TOPIC SENTENCE (2 IDEAS)

2) EXPLAIN FIRST IDEA
3) EXPLAIN SECOND IDEA
4) GIVE EXAMPLE OF SECOND IDEA

I THINK THE ESSAY PPT I SEND YOU ARE PRETTY CLEAR, SO WHY DO YOU KEEP
THROWING AWAY THE STRUCTURE WHICH EXAMINERS LIKE AND JUST WRITE RAN-
DOMLY AS YOU LIKE?

I CAN TEACH YOU HOW TO DO IT, HELEN, BUT IF YOU ARE JUST GOING TO DO IT
YOUR OWN WAY THEN YOU WILL HAVE A LOW SCORE.

On the other hand, while- teenagers have more power and healthy body than
the older, I would argue that the advantages of this situation outweigh the disad-
vantages. NO IDEAS! Older people have more wisdom and experience, they can
teach the new young employee how to avoid making - identical mistakes, and fur-
ther share their insights to them. In some particular expertise fields, older experts
with experiences can contribute their studies and technologies, which are beneficial
to human beings. For example, Some old doctors have abundant medical knowledge
and surgery experiences, they can quickly to realize the root causes of diseases.

NOT AS I TAUGHT YOU.

AGAIN:

1) TOPIC SENTENCE (2 IDEAS)

2) EXPLAIN FIRST IDEA
3) EXPLAIN SECOND IDEA
4) GIVE EXAMPLE OF SECOND IDEA

WHAT IS THE POINT IN HAVING WRITING CLASSES IF YOU’RE JUST GOING TO IG-
NORE EVERYTHING I TEACH YOU? WE’VE LITERALLY BEEN LEARNING FOR MONTHS
NOW AND YOU STILL JUST WRITE RANDOMLY AS YOU LIKE.

In conclusion, whilst youngsters have advantages on manual labor, I firmly be-

lieve that-older people have–the valuable experience and professional to benefit our
society.

THERE’S ABOUT 1.5 IDEAS HERE WHEN WE SHOULD HAVE 4.

HELLO BAND 4.5! WHAT A WASTE OF TIME! 🙁

EACH ESSAY I SEND YOU HAS A CAREFULLY

LAID OUT STRUCTURE.

THIS STRUCTURE IS BASED ON:

E) EXPERTS OPINIONS ABOUT WHAT AN ESSAY
SHOULD LOOK LIKE
F) MY OWN 15 YEARS EXPERIENCE AS A SPE-
CIALISED IELTS TEACHER/EXAMINER

AND THESE STRUCTURES GENERALLY SCORE

BETWEEN 7-7.5 FOR MY STUDENTS.
SO WHY ARE YOU IGNORING IT? IT IS VERY,
VERY FRUSTRATING HELEN.