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9 Cold Email Copywriting Formulas That Boost Response
9 Cold Email Copywriting Formulas That Boost Response
Example:
Hi John - I came across your name through our work with Sean Emberley,
Sales Ops Analyst at Planview.
He’s running payment calculations for 150 reps reps in 2 hours with eight
comp plans - 99% payment accuracy.
Since you have 100+ reps, I thought you might be interested too.”
Example:
"John - does calculating and running variable comp for 100+ payees @
ACME take 5+ hours? My condolences :-). Imagine cutting 5 hours into 5
min. (You don’t have to imagine it - 3-minute DEMO VID URL)."
Example:
"John - You can determine payouts for 100+ reps with 98% payout
accuracy even if rules are messy -stuff like no contracts, no software, comp
plans tied to multiple things, ramp periods, estimation, etc. (3 min DEMO
VIDEO URL)"
Example:
"John - Noticed you have 100+ reps. (Yes, I count reps for a living :-) Have
you tried automating comp payouts so you don't have to spend a lot of time
getting data out of Salesforce?”
“John - Looks like you have 150+ reps. Have you considered automating
comp payouts to reduce errors? ACME is seeing accuracy over 98%. No
time spent getting data out of Salesforce.”
5. The Cliffhanger.
Example:
"John - Gong shed Excel & Crystal Reports - they’re seeing zero
complaints from reps re their calculations or statements. Payees preview
updated pay statements as deals close. Open to seeing a 2 minute video
on how they did it?”
"Steve, are you spending 2-3 biz days copying/pasting + getting data out of
Salesforce to run variable calculations?
Over 4k Sales Ops Analysts are running calculations for 150+ payees in
2.1 hours.
Example:
Sales Ops Analysts at X & Y are running variable comp for 150+ payees in
2 hours compared to 3 days before - accuracy within 1% even with
adjustments/kickers based on various loan products.
Example:
Example:
“Hey John - Built an app that runs payment calculations for 150 reps reps in
2 hours with eight comp plans - 99% payment accuracy. Since you have
100 reps I thought you might be interested. Open to a 2 minute video so
you can see how it works?”