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UNIT 2. Lesson 2
Canary
 FOCUS

THESIS
STATEME
NT OUTLINE
Thesis 1 -the overall idea or

Statement argument of the work

2 -an arguable assertion--

your opinion or position
It's brainstorming
time!
Thesis Topic
Statement Sentence
TASK 2 Page 31
Enrolling in a state university
is practical since the cost is
low and the quality of
instruction is high.
 Pornography is harmful to
society because it
depersonalizes and dehumanizes
sexuality and it is degrading
and oppressive to women.
Violent video games should be
made illegal, for it might
incite some people to commit
violent acts.
 REVISED
EXAMPLE

How will we know when

Henri Matisse was we've solved this problem?
considered, with Picasso,
one of the two great
artists of the twentieth
century.
Merely a statement
of fact
EXAMPLE REVISED

How will we know when

we've solved this problem?
Henri Matisse is superior to
Henri Matisse was
Picasso because of Matisse’s
considered, with Picasso,
brilliant ability to shift between
one of the two great
realism, abstraction, Fauvism,
artists of the twentieth
and classicism.
century.
 REVISED
EXAMPLE

How will we know when

Homelessness in San we've solved this problem?
Francisco is a serious
problem in today’s
society.
Too broad or too
general
EXAMPLE REVISED

How will we know when

we've solved this problem?
The problems with
Homelessness in San
homelessness in San Francisco
Francisco is a serious
could be resolved if the Board
problem in today’s
of Supervisors would agree on
society.
some of the proposed
solutions.
 REVISED
EXAMPLE

How will we know when

Getting into Disneyland we've solved this problem?
on the Saturday during
Labor Day weekend can
be difficult.
Too specific
EXAMPLE REVISED

How will we know when

we've solved this problem?
Getting into Disneyland Getting into Disneyland can be
on the Saturday during difficult, depending on the time
Labor Day weekend can of year.
be difficult.
 REVISED
EXAMPLE

How will we know when

The proposed transit we've solved this problem?
system is worth
examining, but it has
several weaknesses, so it
should be run only on an
experimental basis for a
limited period of a couple
of years.
More than one main
idea
EXAMPLE REVISED

How will we know when

The proposed transit we've solved this problem?
system is worth The proposed transit system
examining, but it has should be run on an
several weaknesses, so it experimental basis for a limited
should be run only on an period of a couple of years.
experimental basis for a
limited period of a couple
of years.
 REVISED
EXAMPLE

How will we know when

we've solved this problem?

How life is in New York

after September 11th.
A fragment
EXAMPLE REVISED

How will we know when

we've solved this problem?
After September 11th, the city
How life is in New York of New York tends to have more
after September 11th. cases of post-traumatic
disorder than other areas of the
United States and rightfully so.
 REVISED
EXAMPLE

How will we know when

we've solved this problem?

Should an eighteen year

old have the right to
drink?
A question
EXAMPLE REVISED

How will we know when

we've solved this problem?
Anyone old enough to fight a
Should an eighteen year war should be old enough to
old have the right to drink.
drink?
 REVISED
EXAMPLE

How will we know when

GOP candidate Bill Simon we've solved this problem?
and Governor Gray Davis
may appear to be
different, but in my
opinion they are very
similar.
Personal
EXAMPLE REVISED

How will we know when

To the unsuspecting voter, GOP
we've solved this problem?
GOP candidate Bill Simon
candidate Bill Simon and
and Governor Gray Davis
Governor Gray Davis might
may appear to be
seem to offer a choice in the
different, but in my
gubernatorial race; however, in
opinion they are very
fact they take very similar
similar.
stands on certain issues.
 REVISED
EXAMPLE

How will we know when

Negative things have we've solved this problem?
resulted from religion
being taught in our
schools
Vague language
EXAMPLE REVISED

How will we know when

Negative things have Religion as part
we've of the
solved school
this problem?

resulted from religion curriculum should be avoided

being taught in our because a person’s religious
schools beliefs are highly personal and
require individual commitment.
SEATWORK
 An after-school job can be
harmful to teenagers as working
not only reduces opportunities
for social and recreational time
but also takes away valuable
time from schoolwork.
 Welfare benefits for single
mothers should not be
eliminated, for the benefits are
needed to prevent hunger and
poverty among our country’s
most helpless citizens—our
children.
Television has had a serious
impact in today’s society
An evaluation of the benefits of
Prozac
Have you ever considered why
people are so rude when they
drive, especially at rush hour?
Qualities of a good
thesis statement

It is focused; provides It has clear boundaries.

It is framed as a
supporting points that It sets limit as to what
declarative strengthen the main the essay intends to
statement. claim. explore
 OUTLINE
-shows the logical
arrangement of ideas
included in the essay
FORMAT PRINCIPLES
1 PARALLELISM

2 COORDINATION

3 SUBORDINATION

4 DIVISION
 PARALLELISM
Entries should observe the same
language structure (words,
phrases, etc.)
 COORDINATION
Entries should observe levels of
importance.
 SUBORDINATION
Entries should observe differences
of importance.
 DIVISION
Entries should at least be two to
be sure that supporting points of
a major idea are adequate.
 Follow these steps when you
make an essay
STEPS FOR 1 Determining the topic, purpose,

PLANNING AN role, and audience

Expanding subtopics. This
ESSAY 2
requires determining scope of
the work.
An essay requires preparatory Collecting sources and
3
steps. making notes.
Brainstorming, forming
4
thesis statement, and
outlining.

5 Drafting.

6
Peer evaluation and revision
Thank you for
listening!