ASSIGNMENT 1

Rewrite the following an email to demonstrate your understanding of the features of

business/workplace communication. Business email should be concise and no repetition
to ensure readability. Is the following email concise? Revise if it is not.
To : All Full-Time Staff
From : Senior Manager (CS)
Subject: -

I'm writing to inform you that the 2016/2017 campus car parking permits (Class A Permit)
will expire at the end of August 2017. You can renew your permit online starting at 9:00 am
on Tuesday, June 5, 2017.
Please note that only online applications will be accepted, with rare exceptions. To renew
your permit, update your information and upload the required documents as follows:
1. Copy of the Hong Kong Vehicle Registration Document (both sides) and a marriage
certificate if the vehicle is in your spouse's name
2. Copy of the vehicle's insurance policy
3. Copy of your driving license
4. Copy of your staff ID card.
Your prompt cooperation is appreciated. Failure to submit documents on time may delay your
application. Please review the Campus Traffic and Parking Regulations on our website before
applying.
For Class A Permit renewals, processing is on a first-come, first-served basis. You're
responsible for the accuracy of your application.
An annual fee of $2,000 ($1,000 for half a year) will be deducted from your salary in August
2017 Payroll upon approval. Staff members of CLE should pay via check or sign an
Authorization Form for Deduction of Salary for Car Parking Permit.
If you need clarification, contact us at XXX or XXX.

Manager
Campus Facilities Office